====Nonchalance=====

====Nonchalance====

copyright@pushkar prabhat, 29-04-15

 

i had a plan:

Nonchalance!

i had planted                                        

                Some sparks in the hay......

Explosion was known.

 

It, still hurts though.

 

Finally,

        Reaped the blow.....

Calm confusion was pretence,,,

Doors were bolted,                    

Windows grilled,                         

And lights out.                             

 

Stillness was the only sound.

 

i discovered your notes

                in the survival kit:                               

some thoughts, to calm me.    

some promises, to fuel hope.  

And that joke,                              

        Ridiculously stupid,

                        Hazardous joke.

Maybe, laughing seemed fun;

i laughed my a*s off,                          

                        just for the sake of it.

 

They found me.....

They hunt in packs.

Sadness, depression, grief, remorse.....

 

Walls were just formality,

Scratched, bit, dragged.....

                        out in the rain.

Laughter invited cries.....                           

                I wept for a while.

 

Now everything is damp.

Damn!

Author's Note

suggestions invited.........esp. for title.

Reviews

[~]

Ahhh.. some wonderful verses here:
i discovered your notes
in the survival kit:
some thoughts, to calm me.
some promises, to fuel hope.

wow.. finding things where we least look for them.. just beautiful my friend!

[Pushkar Prabhat]

Thank a lot Skittles.............really appreciate it!!! :) :)

[Sultrysoul]

Wow very gripping and a great way of portraying those feelings. Very relatable. I love it.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

Thank a lot kind poet...........really appreciate it!!! :) :)

[Sultrysoul]

You are very welcome.....you are kind as well....it was my pleasure to read your work :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

same here.......... :) :)

[ManasaC]

this is nice piece...Enjoyed it

[Confuser]

Pushkar: Nonchalance: Well you did something, and I'm having fun trying to decipher it. Okay, if it's love, she's gone and you found these things, a survival kit, great you survived, but in the end: Damn, crying from tear/rain or combination. It's sounds like you were simply careless, didn't pay enough attention to the right things. Alright, hope I'm close, maybe just me. I enjoyed reading it. Some great lines. Thank you...Dale

[Jesse]

No idea but a great write. ...

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WoW!!! thank you so much............!!! :) :)

[nazia]

i see you have already given a title to the work and that too a remarkable one...
Loved the work.. there is no line that doesn't impresses me. Excellent Write Pushkar :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

oh the title was always there......wasn't sure until now.......
thank you so much.........so so glad this impresses you!!! :) :)

[SleeplessVolcano]

Our darker emotions hunting in packs.....such an apt analogy......and "calm confusion was pretence"......we may often seem like a peaceful duck on a clear lake, but underneath, a lot of crazy activity is taking place that no one knows about........

Brilliant poetry! :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WoW!!! beautiful kind review.......thank you so much kind poet!!! :) :)

[micky]

your best so far Pushkar absolutely amazing........i really love this piece

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WoW!!! thank you so much Micky.........so glad you liked it so much........how have you been? :) :)

[micky]

ive been good just got back home today and you

[Pushkar Prabhat]

oh i am great.......other than exams and stuff......

[Dear Aurth,]

Am I missing it ? Or is to be modified again ? ... Love the survival line ...

[Pushkar Prabhat]

nope......no modification.......thank you for reading......

[Jeyanthi]

Awesome work.. but it ended too quickly. :)
(when we are skeptical , we try to experiment our own feelings. don't we ?:P)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

absolutely right...........and yes it ended too soon......what can i say my outbursts lasts only few moments.......... Thank you so much...........always so encouraging.......!!! :) :)

[Jeyanthi]

like explosions... ;)

welcome... :P

[Pushkar Prabhat]

exactly.....!!! :D :D

[Sindu]

This is brilliant! Little somethings can shift all the reason and thinking when least expected. It's so full of emotion and however sad the situation is, it is adorable.
I adore the writing style in this!

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WoW!!! thank you so much amazing poetess...............so glad you liked it so much...........!!! :) :)