====Earthy Path====

a necklace for one beauty's neck.......

====Earthy Path====

copyright@pushkar prabhat, 05/04/2015

 

In Union

with the valley,

delicately contouring down,

the twin, glorious peaks.

 

A Path.........

luring

round a mystical majestic hill........

leading to

places inhabiting angels:

 

twin ranges,

you can whisper your secrets to.....

 

twin cliffs,

where  landslides land, in the hands of love.....

 

up to a lip,

to lands of pleasure and beauty.....

 

the other side,

at the edge of velvet rain forests.....

down to a sea of calm, serene, sensual hypnosis.....

 

i wish to traverse.....

this path, divine,

so many a time,

beyond numbers can count,

in this lifetime!

Author's Note

trying something new.......did ya like it???

Reviews

[fattycbreezy52]

Wow.It's a close scrutiny of nature.Beautiful depiction of nature plus a walking talking scenery free!!!!!!!!!!!!Woah.
great use of imagery and playfulness.It will be good as a slow-motion-lively-nature-movie .Though there is nothing as such but your poem stands out!I love every curve or turn your language takes and nowhere is the link broken!It's yes......Flawless!Ciao

[Penny]

A very beautiful and delaited depiction of s place like heaven. Thanks for sharing.

[Abilash Uttama]

a vivid description of nature, enjoyable read :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

Thank you so much.............!!! :) :)

[~]

A very picturesque and sensual write. A poem that quenches the readers' thirst for nature and human beauty. A thrilling write!

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WoW!!!.........thank you so much Mam..........it means a lot!!! :) :)

[Ruth]

Beautiful...I like your wanders through life and nature so far...much enjoyed...tis a gift to truly see the beauty in this world :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WoW!!! well you have that gift........found this beautiful......didn't you?? :D
thank you so much..............!!!! :) :)

[nazia]

I liked the path you t took to design this work. Your thought process works wonder Pushkar :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

thank you so much nazia................!!! :) :)

[JayceeC]

I really like the word choice for this but not the formatting. I dont think it's that important to this write and it made things a bit difficult to read in places. It actually interupts the flow. I liked it better in other write. I know that is not what you'd like to hear. ..but honesty always.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

oh......no worries........i need honesty.......i put time in formatting........so i need some feedback.............sorry to have disappointed you with this one..........
thank you so much............glad you liked the words.............!!!! :) :)

[Linda alexander]

you can whisper your secrets to.....

twin cliffs,
Reader travels with poet or poet takes reader to depth of transcended energy or mystic beauty of earth, really beautiful, liked the poem a lot

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WoW!!! thank you so much.............so glad you liked it!!! :) :)

[Linda alexander]

You welcome, take care, keep going with your poetry

[R Smith]

The Grand Design, Pushkar you took us along a long path, into a wonderful work of poetry :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

Thank you so much Sir............!!! :) :)

[Sindu]

As I read this, I can imagine hiker appreciating the beauty of nature, travelling the valleys and hills but it's like I'm mocking myself cos here, the nature of beauty is what matters or should I say, more of a beauty than nature ;)
This is a sensual write, buddy! I can see that it flows better, imagery is alluring.. if that is what you meant by 'new'. Love how you describe her, her neck and every other detail.
... at the edge of velvet rainforest... brilliant! That did it for me :)
Loved it. Keep experimenting!

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WoW!!!! thank you so much..............so glad you could see it both ways............so glad that you loved it!!! :) :)

[Sindu]

I think Jaycee is right as well.. The words flow better than your other works but the formatting is not required here. I didnot comment on that.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

oh well thank you......i changed that..........is it okay now??

[Sindu]

Much better :) cut the indents in the second stanza as well.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

done.............!!!

[Sindu]

Oh! That is second one? I meant ..'a path... Angels'. Make it like the one above it.
The last few lines are fine with indents.. Or like this.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

done dana done done!!!

[Kousika]

ofcourse great man.. Nice use of words and lines... Breaking your records by trying new ha ?? :)))

[Pushkar Prabhat]

hehe...........thank you so much..................!!! :) :)

[Kousika]

:))) go ahead.. go ... gooooo...