Lunar Love

lunar cycle of love

====Lunar Love====

copyright@pushkar prabhat, 25-01-2015

Hope, fades first;

 

on the night,

we conceive new dreams.

the night,

of the new moon;

 

it begins.

 

love awakens,

from hibernation,

integrating:

      crescent

            per

                crescent.

 

emotions spring.

 

among neaps of

anxiety, excitement and fear,

some longing, love and desires,

                                     pack into one.

on the night of Mōhalu.

 

moon leaves.

 

reuniting under,

the silver rains of Hua;

lost lovers sail ashore.

spring blooms romance.

      

fulfilled, Hope shines.

 

affirming the old ones,

new promises are made.

moments devoured,

                  oblivious to realised fantasies.

until tide floods eyelids.

 

ships afloat.

 

on Māhealani,

for reason and obligations,

to fish for the future,

all sails must set sail,

 

while patience wanes.

 

pain consumes,

the gibbous of love,

disintegrating:

      crescent

         per

            crescent.

 

it ends.

 

watery eyes awaits the night,

                  to conceive new dreams.

lost, restless souls await,

                  the tide of the new moon.

 

and then, Hope fades.

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Author's Note

reference links:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Lunar_phase
http://www.imiloahawaii.org/57/
http://home.hiwaay.net/~krcool/Astro/moon/moontides/

i would love to learn more about your opinion on this poem.
by the way this is my first poem of 2015.

Reviews

[D]

I've got a confession. at first, I've just scrolled over, collecting ythe words in red :)

found all of the essentials that make up a "normal " (if you can call anything emotional normal. lol)
relationship. hopes, promises, love, and when it ends .. pain. a big deal of life is all about these, and your poem to me speaks of a little more than just "love "

beautiful write. :)
also noticed that the first line... the letters in red spell out "love"

[Pushkar Prabhat]

your observations are spot on..........nothing goes past your keen eyes.........Thank yo so much Kossuth.......means a lot!!! :) :)

[D]

My pleasure :)

[D]

oh... lol jus got chapter six online, and writing number 7. :)

[Penny]

A great start I must say.. it is difficult to write something that is centered around minute observation and requires a detailed and vivid description. Very nice language.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

thank you so much penny!!! you reviews are valuable to me!!!! :) :)

[Penny]

My pleasure :-) and ditto!

[Pushkar Prabhat]

:) :) what have you been upto............??? no RRs from you???

[hardeep sabharwal]

Its so artistic, I love its structure and words, very nicely done :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

thanks a bunch!!! glad you loved it!!! :) :)

[Cool Girl]

I absolutely loved it!! I can't say anything else but that because you've left me speachless. Your words have devoured my words and there for I have nothing left to say:)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

wow!!! thank you so much..........!!!! :) :)

[Cool Girl]

You are very welcome. Thank you for letting me read your amazing work:)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

:) :) you are welcome!! :p

[R Smith]

A highly romantic poem, artistic design, you tell a tale that spans life itself, just magnificent Pushkar :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

thank you so much Sir!!! it means a lot!!! :) :)

[Sindu]

I say you have a brilliant start ( compared to my 'my tainted proposal' -_- what does that bode for me?!)
It's mesmerizing how you give a ride in a circle- where it ends, it begins again. I read it twice, slowed myself and the drastic sense of care you poured into this is amazing. From the journey of lovers spun into the imagery of journey of the moon, vice-versa. Then the anthropomorphization of the whole process-- loved it!
The delicate nature of the love and hidden pain in midst of occasional happiness.. great work!!

[Pushkar Prabhat]

Wow!!! i hope to get only such passionate reviews this year!!! thank you so much!!! :) :)