Claustrophobic Ambitions

My dreams are afraid of closed spaces.

Claustrophobic   Ambitions

copyright@pushkar prabhat 29/12/2014

i

tiny self

~Acknowledge~

unimportant as i may,

i know! i know i am, was, will; be nothing.

but nothing is not what i want

'anything' can not satisfy

demands i have none

just desire:

fairplay.

i

appreciate

resistance like challenges.

favouritism doesn't cause me to spill,

but an active conspiracy deserves my wrath;

deserves every man, an opportunity, O fate!

don't limit me to one room, same walls.

untie me, stop,

remove this

blindfold.

i

can hear,

these walls closing,

stop, stop, make it stop; don't crush my

Claustrophobic Ambitions

for my dreams are big, huge, GRAND!

don't squeeze them in the corner

of immediate necessities;

of worldly duties;

Stop!

i

warn, though,

insatiable lust this,

knows nothing about proportions.

potential is the motto & persistence a strategy

resilience is my revolution.

all force shall amplify

i beseech thee

O fate,

Stop!

i

humble being,

~Acknowledge~

but you don't know my dreams,

fear shall only feed their survival instincts.

let the doors flung open; let breathe.

Stop! Stop don't crush my 

precious, rebellious

claustrophobic

ambitions.

Reviews

[Mavericks]

Loved the Theme. Creativity at it's Best. And, I Respect your Urge for Freedom. Being Yourself is the Best thing one can do for himself, for Each Soul has it's own Life Path. Opinion's of other's are like Onion's. Nothing Else really Matter's. Remind me of that Song. It's my Life =)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

Thanks a lot kind poet............really appreciate it!!! :) :)

[Mavericks]

...........................:) :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really like this piece, it is filled with wonderful oxymorons and paradoxes ---

in the grand scheme of things...just let me what i am going to be...

don't try to stifle my dreams...don't let them die in the tediousness of necessity...let me dream above all that.

jacob

[Pushkar Prabhat]

well summarized sir! thank you so much!! :) :)

[Sami Khalil]

A masterful pen upon this. I like it a lot...:).................

[AprilRN1210]

I have to say this is my new favorite of yours.. I love the message and the creative way in which it was delivered.. empowering, inspiring, and honest!.. so many awesome lines..

"don't squeeze them in the corner
of immediate necessities;
of worldly duties;".... we too often let this happen.. I know I am guilty of this..

"potential is the motto & persistence a strategy
resilience is my revolution."... heck yeah!.. I love this!..

love the rebellious tone... we all have obstacles, fears, and baggage, but with that strength, determination, and resilience--we will overcome, thrive, and succeed.. well done!

one small note, just my opinion, for what it is worth..


"let the doors flung open; let breathe."... stumbled here.. would probably change "flung" to "fling" and cut out the word "let" and just say breathe.. or add "me".. "let me breathe"... but having used "let" in the first part of the sentence would probably just leave it off.. again, just my opinion :)

[Sindu]

Fight! Kick, yell, scratch! Do not stop.
A fiery passion and inspiration. Beautifully reflects your chaotic yet unyielding state, not to give up or withdraw but begging, demanding to keep moving forward. I love it Mr. Nese or Mr. Serious according to this.
I guess giving up and wallowing in self pity... :P
I guess I have to face my claustrophobic ambitions... Nice way to start a year.. :)

[rashu]

really beautiful..very creative and emotions were expressed excellently one of your best poem:)
keep it up:)
happy new year:)

[R Smith]

your best ever poem Pushkar, remarkable forming of the lines and strong emotions, Happy new year to you and your family :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

Thank you much sir. You made my year!!!!
Happy new year to you too and your family!!! :):)

[Afraa]

One word: Impressive!

Definitely a unique piece of work as well. I admire creativity and you got me with your stanzas going in and out. Excellent choice of font too.

May I ask what inspired you to write this? This poem is an inspiration itself. You sound like you have a big imagination. Outstanding job!

[Pushkar Prabhat]

Thank you so much for such generous review.
Well the inspiration was simple. You must have had such moments when you had to do something which meant nothing to you but was none the less important
While in the process you had to ignore doing something of great value.
The wavy structure is the byproduct of my everyday dealings with waveforms and the representation of the mental conflict in the said situation.
And as for imagination, as writers we all do have one; big? I don't know.
Thanks again. I am so glad you enjoyed so much.

[Ruth]

Wow! Impressive cascading of self and reflective poignancy! xo

[Pushkar Prabhat]

Thank you for this kind visit and review!!!! :)

[CA Anurag Sharma]

Amazing read...loved the last para most

[Pushkar Prabhat]

Thank you so much!!!! :):)

[Abhijeet]

Excellent and amazing :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

Thank you!!!! :) :)