halo.

halo.

copyright@pushkar prabhat, 2014

Halo,

Of an old self.

Self that was

Great

Could have been:

Corona,

i, dreamt of a crown.

Crown i envied

Unfortunately

Should not have become:

Nimbus,

To wash away.

Away in rain

Ephemeral

   Leftovers of becoming:

    Halo.

Reviews

[R Smith]

i love the presentation, i see in this you recognize the halo as a great soul, you dream to become such but envy is a sin and somehow your wish is washed away in a tide of envy in the form of rain and you are left unable to attain that desire, i may be wrong but then its good to throw in an interpretation of our words, thank you for this work :)

[Amulya Bhardwaj]

It ws interestng!! Nice one!! ;)

[MYSELF]

A different set of style of write.
Thoughts put into words, references used pretty well.
NICE WORK

Regards:
KD "MYSELF"

[Pushkar Prabhat]

thank to thyself!!! appreciate it!! :) :)

[Dipanjan Dutta]

Keep going mate...do not envy what yoy haven't achieved...think you are the best and all that you don't get is not worth getting... ;)

Sounds unambitious?? may be but that helps in being ambitious..

as of the poetry...well that's what i talked about right away...didn't I?

:) :)

[MomzillaNC]

We all want to be more; but sometimes we all get bogged down and lost in the envy of what we perceive we have not achieved. The hope is to get back to that better soul we aspire to.

[Confuser]

I saw this as a journey of regret; maybe spiritual, I thought it was a great write. Simple words expressed so nicely. I guite enjoyed the imagery. It is sad. Transformation. Thank you.

[hardeep sabharwal]

Nice, what I most like here is presentation, really enjoyed the read :)
good job mate

[Sami Khalil]

I do like your creativity Pushkar whether in form or wording. Excellent, sir...:).....................

[Rene Salinas]

Interesting although the form might seem rigid to start with . The last words used for the beggining of the next sentence but once I got passed the form the allusion to the Halo and that's not the game or the song my goodness. It is essentially a theological representatio nof a circle of light which will indicate holiness. Here the becoming supposedly meaning that the intentions are well cemented and hopefully bear holy fruit.

Great values shown here

Thankyou

[micky]

I really love this piece envy can drive our desires further away that what they already were. Great lesson and awesome piece :)