To me, From self

for the challenge in "Poetry challenge" group: Write a letter to 13yr old self.

====To, me.

From, self====

copyright@pushkar prabhat, 2014

 

You boy.....

Pay attention....

Look me in the eye

When i am talking to you....

i know you got problems:

With authority and system.

But this is you talking;

Respect and pay attention....

 

Alright, alright, alright!

 

So you must’ve found,

Poetry by now......

i know you are writing a novel......

TAKE both of’em seriously.

Understand what i am saying.......

This world has got two kinds of people,

Which? doesn’t matter.

Coz you’re the third kind.

Life is hard.....

You will soon start losing everything.

But don’t doubt yourself, ever.

The hope will be lost.......

But gather your strength,

Improve all those skills you claim;

And be ready.

It will get worse.....

And then you will find love!

So you will start enjoying the s**t......

(If you know what i mean.)

And what is it with you and porn........

Avoid it as much as possible;

Coz one, you’re gonna get addicted.

And two: that stuff ain’t healthy.

So don’t do that.

 

Alright, alright, alright!

 

Soon your parents will

Start behaving differently.......

Don’t hate them......

They just want best for you....

They won’t understand you;

But you can, so do that.

Now more important things:

i am trying hard to realize your dreams,

And your help will be appreciated

In the future.

You are doing good, don’t worry.

But we could have done better........

Just be more of yourself.....

And work as you wish.....

Do what you want.

Don’t let anybody tell you,

What to do......

You will know better......you always do.

Now don’t even listen to me, if you want.

But do the thinking........

Just like you always do.

And we will be fine.

You are awesome!!!

 

Alright, alright, alright!

 

This is goodbye then,

Take care.

All the best!!!!

Author's Note

it's not that good a poem but i've tried to be honest and motivating for my 13yr old self.
yes i don't know why but i wrote this in Matthew McConaughey's accent, to some extent. Maybe inspired by his Oscar speech. i don't know.
Thanks to MusicManiac for the challenge.........it led to some introspection.
i hope all the readers will enjoy.

Reviews

[Eleanor]

I could relate with this one. We all go through that phase in which no one seems to understand us. We all have been alone or still are. But we shouldn't give up. I love your way to express it through the mind of a 13 year old!
I even liked the try to do it in McConaughey's way. Another great job :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

HaHa...... thanks a lot........!!! :) :)

[Luximir]

This reminds me when I had this going through my head, brings back great... but also terrible memories haha, that feeling of being alone. Thank you for sharing! Loved it! :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

Thank you for you time and review!!! :) :)

[Confuser]

Thought it was wonderful and very clever. I'm reading below about a challenge; sounds like you did well. I just enjoyed your writing. Made me smile. Thank you so very much.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

thank you so much........so glad you enjoyed reading it!!!

[Confuser]

I did, tks. Dale

[MusicManiac]

Hello there!

First of all, thank you so much for taking up the challenge but I'm even more glad that it led to some inspiration!

To echo Momzilla, I really like your diction. Your letter is one that wouldn't lose the attention span or interest of a thirteen year old--because let's be honest, most thirteen year olds couldn't care less about the English language and all of the grammatical rules and fine literature that comes with it (well, unless you, like me, enjoyed being a "Can I/May I" smart alec).

But going off of that, even though your diction is colloquial, your overall tone right from the start is one of, for lack of a better word, authority. Given what you were writing to yourself initially about not liking the system and authority, it was really interesting how you got your 13-year-old-self's attention in the first stanza.

I really like how you're basically telling yourself that you do know best and to follow what you, as a thirteen year old, think. Being a teenager is hard in the aspect of having a conflicting mindset--we thought we knew what was best for ourselves, yet we tried to please others ("Just be more of yourself..."). Hearing a push from an older, wiser you about how thirteen-year-old-you really does know best could've been all that was needed to have less regretted actions, but they're only regrets if we don't learn from them.

You obviously have some wise things to tell yourself and I hope this challenge kind of gave you a pat-on-the-back because we all have grown up so much since then!

Thank you for sharing this--I enjoyed reading it!

~MusicManiac

[Pushkar Prabhat]

Wow..............you totally decoded this one.......thought this was not much of a crpt......but, yes i did put some thought on how should the language and setting be.......thank you so much for dedicating time for the review and understanding what i wanted to say.........and yes i love that "Can i/ may i"...........nowadays it is not so common........but usually in old/period or the British movies it can be seen and it's very fascinating!

[MusicManiac]

You're welcome! I apologize if it seemed like it was picking apart your poem!

[Pushkar Prabhat]

naah......no need to apologize.......i don't even know what you are talking about :P :) :)

[Sindu]

It's amazing! Now I understand how also this challenge can be fulfilled. Haha :)
It's very touching and funny, ya it is.
I think you did brilliant in this dialogue. McConaughey's way ;)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

thank you..........thank you so much!!! So glad you liked it!! :) :)

[Sindu]

How can I not!! :D

[Pushkar Prabhat]

you could get hit in the head and then you might.......Aright, alright, alright!!!

[Sindu]

Hah! You can try.. Alright alright alright!

[Pushkar Prabhat]

:D :P :p :) :)

[Sindu]

:P :P :D :)

[MomzillaNC]

Actually, I rather like the colloquial delivery of your dialogue in this piece.

NOTES: The personal pronoun "I" should be capitalized.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

yes i thought that my 13yr old self wouldn't make through a fine piece of poetry( and also because i couldn't write one!! :p)
the 'i' that is a bad habit, you know that.
Thank you so much for the review.........so glad you liked it!!! :) :)

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome.

[MomzillaNC]

Make sure you post this to the group page too.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

i already did that......... :)

[MomzillaNC]

Thanks. :D

[Sami Khalil]

I like the dialogue style of this poem. Bravo, sir...:).....................

[Pushkar Prabhat]

thank you Sami.........so glad you liked it!!! :)

[Sami Khalil]

Yep. You are welcome...:).....

[R Smith]

it is that good a poem and the advice to yourself is the best you could give, a remarkable entry to your challenge, well done Pushkar :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

thank you so much sir...........it means a lot!!! :) :)