Valley of Expiation

====Valley of Expiation====

copyright@pushkar prabhat, 2014

 

Echoes of a bleeding shower,

Occupy the nothingness;

Water falling through: empty,

Apparition, Me:

Access denied!

 

Faculty of senses, senseless:

What did i witness?

What did i do?

In rush, in fear, in flight;

Perhaps, reason was roadkilled!

 

Rising realisation:

Emanates beams of guilt;

From over: the folds of mistakes.

It’s late, blood floods my,

Valley of expiation.

 

The choice:

Only a canal can drain this.

Hope shines off the metal;

Hope: forgiveness blooms,

Once the atonement resurfaces.

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Reviews

[Dipanjan Dutta]

Deep thought, true senses and marvellous writing.

"Apparition, me: access denied" - Moved with these lines. Aren't being human today is an apparition itself? we have been losing our identity every moment, failing to realize the evil but still thinking that we haven't sinned - "Rising realization: emanates beams of guilt" - indeed so.

Your choice of words is powerful and you have a great potential. Will love to read more from you.

Thank you

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WoW!!! thank you so much for this generous review and insightful comments!!! :) :)

[Sanjh]

Really deep, the choice of words is wonderful...:)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

thank you so much for this kind review!! :) :)

[Sanjh]

you are welcome...:)

[Sreenath]

splendid write..... great words tied up together to sound something great meaning ... i loved this line
"In rush, in fear, in flight;
Perhaps, reason was roadkilled!"
it explained the lost hope wow .. enjoyed reading it keep smiling peace !!!

[Pushkar Prabhat]

thank you so much for this generous review! you too keep smiling and have a great day! peace!! :) :)

[Gurleen Saluja]

A typical one for me. Quite expressive.
Thanks for sharing.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

thanks a lot........appreciate it!! :) :)

[Gurleen Saluja]

You're welcome :)