From Leaf to Tree

Cliché as it sounds, Tree, it’s not you - it’s me.

Fall came to remind us that a love like ours was never meant to last.

Weep not at our parting, but remember

How we were in months of spring.

I clung to you and aged upon your limbs,

And whispered you my secrets in the summer.

We laughed in rain and shivered in the chill,

And together welcomed birds that came to call.

But as the sun began to shorten day,

Our silences grew long and a warning wind began to red my cheek.

I won’t resent September for the change it brought -

I’d gladly take the blame for our goodbye.

But know that while I may have flown to freedom,

 

From you I never had the dream to fly

Reviews

[David Scott]

You got my attention... I liked the line, "I clung to you and aged upon your limbs,".
Yes it is cliche', but done it a way that is a fresh reminder not a boring rehash.
Enjoyed this poem.

[Michael G.]

Lovely and thoughtful.
A very enjoyable read.
Keep writing.

[Reed Rickmers]

Your words have a chemistry.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

one of my best friends lives in Naperville...I lived in Lockport for ten years after moving from NY..

yay...a fellow Illinoisian.

jacob

[thenakedverse]

i noticed you were from carbondale! my brother went to SIU

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that's how i got to carbondale...came to SIU in '68--

stayed...taught there in the late 80's but now am at john a. logan and shawnee community colleges...

but yes...comfortable place for me to live...how did your brother like it down here?

[thenakedverse]

he ended up transferring to ISU for some reason. he disliked his roommate or something? some silly reason.

what do you teach?!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

English comp. and lit. Sometimes creative writing or tech writing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i disliked some roommates too..i just got different roommates the next semester.

[thenakedverse]

yah exactly.. he must have taken it a little too personal haha. it is definitely my dream to get published though, I love creative writing. I'm not currently in school but will be transferring next fall.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

start sending stuff out...it will happen.

good luck with school...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i love both poems...the tree losing the leaf...and the leaf finding its freedom from the tree...

great phrasing in both pieces...

these two pieces are publishable as a pair...

thanks for the reads...

jacob

[Clayton Bardwell]

Beautifully poignant.