Urban Coyote

Those that wander the night...

This urban coyote

Pays a visit early morning

Under a sharpened scythe of a moon

Creeps round my bushes

Like he's moving in

The cats that screeched under my window

Have gone to tussle on other grounds

And leave the coyote his domain

Rich in new delicacies 

While he crouches

Silent and imminently present

He carries his daggers

In a pouch out front

Ready when the moment flashes

Like the silver reflection

His blade gives off

As it passes through the night air

Grim thrusts make crimson droplets

Splatter the grassy canvas like Pollard wanted

A random purposeful pattern

Blots and streaks settle gently in the display

He appraises his work momentarily, finishes

Yelps his quiet triumph and wanders away

Author's Note

Any comments and suggestions are welcome.

Reviews

[Jack Wolfe]

I have to ask, is it the coyote striking with that blade? or an the urban cowboy? I thinking the latter, though I must admit, I'm not too fond of coyotes, but being named Wolf its quite disturbing. I believe I'm reading the scene correct. I'm a little tired and been tipping a few, if I'm correct you created a vivid scene in very short order.

[J. Land]

I attempt a parallel between the urban coyotes that roam around my neighborhood, snatching my neighbors pets, and the homicide rate that seems to have exploded recently. I like your interpretation. I'm still not sure about the structure as this is a first draft. Thanks for your feedback, as always. Hope you're enjoying your evening.

[Jack Wolfe]

I understood the comparison, I'm assume both teeth and bullet are the impression of the blade, both out for blood, but only one really walks back off into the night. I enjoyed it, as far as format, there were a few minor spots where it seemed crisp lines, e.g. Under a sharpened scythe of a moon, and you followed through with simplicity, e.g Like he's moving in, or, Silent and imminently present. Then again, I may not be the best person to ask.

[J. Land]

I'm turning this idea over as a novel, once I've finished my current endeavor. I'm taking your advice and checking out McMurtry. I might take a trip out to Archer City and bug the hell out of him a bit.

[Jack Wolfe]

If you do give him my regards, great book, and miniseries. I hope my last comments helped some, and let me know when I can see the next part.

[J. Land]

You've been quite helpful. I'll do a rewrite and finish out the first chapter before moving on to the next, Should be about a week.

[Jack Wolfe]

Message me or send a read request, I 'will' forget. Have a good niight