The Forest at Dusk in the Rain

A free verse poetry painting.

In the forest at dusk

Rain masks the twilight

With coal colored fog 

Like black lace draped over weary trees

Hunched slightly forward

Under the weight of the air,

The currents of rain,

And the beetles gnawing at their bark.

Author's Note

Please give me your honest feedback. Any suggestions are welcome.

Reviews

[Ashira Macy]

Fantastic imagery on this.

With coal colored fog
Like black lace draped over weary trees
Hunched slightly forward
Under the weight of the air,

This made me think that perhaps the tree was mourning something. Perhaps it is just me that thinks so, but either way your words painted an ethereal picture and were a delight to absorb.

[J. Land]

Thank you for your kind words. Really, it is only whatever you, as the reader, take out of the poem that truly matters. For me, I put the words down and see where the audience takes them.

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Beautiful imagery, nicely written. I loved it. :)

[New Theory]

beautiful imagery just doing what it intended to paint.

[jjwilbourne]

Love this imagery! So well done.

[Rita L. Sev]

I have breathed in that forest air... A nice, descriptive piece, J.

[Emily]

I like the meaning, great write!

[J. Land]

Thank you.

[Delmar Cooper]

A poem of mood and place. A world building poem where the world is a microcosm. Simple, elegant and effective.

[J. Land]

Thank you.

[C. Rose]

Congratulations!
This piece made it to the top 9 out of 226 submissions.
As your reward, I am sending out RRs on your behalf.
I encourage you to submit this piece to the Promote Me! group's library where the winning pieces of previous contests reside. http://www.writerscafe.org/groups/Promote-Me%21/11216/

Below is the link to vote for Promote Me! III. Voting closes August 15th, 2014.
http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/Promote-Me%21-III-%28Poetry%29/50213/

[J. Land]

Thank you so very much! It's a wonderful honor for fellow writers to enjoy my work.

[Lost in Wonderland]

This piece was filled with a vaguely haunting, and melancholic imagery; I could see it all. Lovely poem!
God Bless:)

[J. Land]

Again, I thank you. Have a fantastic evening.

[Lost in Wonderland]

No problem at all:) Have a lovely night as well