If I Could...

something popped up and out of my head =D!

If i could kill you

   maybe then it would shut up.

If i could just make you be quiet

   then just maybe

   i could go about life a little bit easier.

If you could just stay away,

   stay far far away,

   in a corner of my brain,

   that couldn't be opened unless I gave the say so,

   then maybe things would be a little funnier to me.

If you would just go away for a really long time

   i think life would be a little bit easier to tolerate.

But no-

   you won't go away.

Instead, you play at the back of my brain,

   pinching me at every single little place that you can,

   reminding me that everything about me is insanity

   and complete horror.

...?

My past self...

   every time you come into mind,

   reminding me of how stupid life really is here,

   all that comes to mind is:

   KILL...!

If i could only make you go away.

If only...

Author's Note

well there u have it. absolute insanity that just seems to pop up more often these days. i wonder what's going to happen that keeps that word coming back over and over again?
extra note: my grammar is probably my worst attribute. no wait, it's my vocabulary. i swear i should carry a pocket thesaurus these days xD

Reviews

[K. Aurora]

Musings of a crazed mind! I love it! It' so random and insane that it's beautiful!

Maycroft was right! You are a wild writer. It's so refreshing to see someone explore these different edges of the mind and how they twist and turn and spit stuff out onto the page!

Another Great Write!

Kansas :)

[djeehc09]

Whoa I haven't been on here for like forever. Very intense sort of piece. During the whole poem I just imagine you in a strait jacket rocking back and forth in a padded room musing "Mars is amazing...". So you got the insane part in.

Now the other part: "My past self" is very vague; maybe characterizing it in some way would add to why it makes you insane. Well, that's if you ever feel like coming back to change this.

[Rachel Hays]

Wow! I'm serious. I'd really hate to piss you off. I know the pen is mightier than the sword, but honey, you've got both!! Hehe. This is really good. I like the emotion and the structure of it. It's really catching. The grammar, sure, could use some attention, but who's doesn't? When I read things and the grammar isn't right on and the tone of the poem or story is similar to this, it makes me see the speed and emotion that came. Quick and furious. In a piece like this, it adds character. High five, sister!

[Mr. Lopez]

Wow ! This has to be your darkest so far !! Not sure if this is based on a reality or not but if it is ....know that the memories will fade . Sounds lame , i know but it is true. Very powerful write !

Mr. Lopez