Get Up All the Way

yeah...um...hmm...*just smiles maniacally* XD i got mad enough to really write about this girl

Get Up All the Way

 

I found you as a doll that was wandering aimlessly,

so pitiful that I picked you up.

You were a doll that I didn't want to play with

but did anyways.

Almost two years later we played every day,

and then someone wanted to take you,

to play different ways...

But you wanted to play in even more different ways,

you wanted to make it look as if the world

was just a black hole that always mistreated you.

And now that playmate means absolutely nothing to you.

He is a "bad memory", something you choose not to play with,

something you feel now is something not worth playing with, even.

There you are now, lying around all the time,

waiting, just waiting for someone to play with a sewn and patched up dolly.

I tried to make you real afterwards,

tried so hard at that,

tried to make you human;

I thought it worked.

And now you even have another playmate,

one that you have let manipulate you,

make you into something even more strange

than the doll that you already were.

This strange thing,

this hybrid between dolly and human,

it scares me,

it's ugly

and

sadder to look at than what you were before.

Please, get up off the floor,

be a real girl.

As time moves on,

reality will pick you up off the floor and drag you as a hybrid.

So, please, get up all the way while you still can...

Author's Note

WAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!! Chee and MamaSissy know who i'm talking about, *more maniacal laughter*

Reviews

[djeehc09]

damn you... but it's hilarious!!

On a constructive note, nice metaphors; I feel your pain and understand your concern for this person. But I don't think it's that bad... yet. Somedays I feel exactly the same about her and wish she would, I dunno grow up; but then you realize that she wouldn't be who she is if she suddenly became this dead-serious mature "adult" all overnight. It's like seeing a little sister grow up too fast. I think that we should take in the time left that we have of this personality; We's a gonna be seniors next year and then after that...

[Mr. Lopez]

Some will always be a puppet for another. Lacking the inner strength and confidence to stand alone first before they can learn to stand with another. Great poem my friend.

[Lyra H]

Nicely done!

[shadadakiya]

well that is different sound's kinds like you were using this doll as an example of some one you know good craft

[-!katie!-]

this is really good.
well done.
very original, and you can tell you're concerned

bravo :]

[alternative_be]

Sometimes people change a lot to such an extent that you do not recognize them. Whatever you try, they do not come back. I guess that is called evolution. Sometimes people evolve at a different speed and whatever you do, you grow apart... That is why they say: 'if you love somebody, set them free!'
Nevertheless, the outcome remains painful for both parties.
Your account of that kind of relationship is so tangible and very realistic.

Great poem. I liked the start. Unique and different. I like this.

[*~Imperfectly Me~*]

It's hard to make someone "human" when they choose to be a doll... It's like Pinocchio even though he is walking and talking he is not truly a real boy... I like how you use the metaphor... you can really see this girl doll like walking around.... great Job... You can feel your emotions flood the page... :)