Guess I Was Wrong

Your heart must be broken
Or not working right
For you to not like me
But like the one who broke your heart

It will happen again
But this time I won't be here
To make your tears go away
Cause of her words

I just hope your happy
For doing this to me
My heart is fully broken
And nothing can fix this

But why do you love her
When she has someone already
She will only break your heart
When I could never do that

I will love you forever my prince
Even if you don't love me back

By: Essentia

Author's Note

for vampyre camuel....

Reviews

[Legion]

The anguish you feel is not portrayed deeply enough for its true nature. Not a bad piece mind you, but you could dig deeper and make it stand out with impact. You want the reader to feel the same pain and angst that you feel. Make them feel the hearbreak you feel. Don't just tell them about it meekly. They will not remember the piece without making some kind of connection with it. I hope this makes sense.

[moongoddess]

I enjoyed this poem. It took me back to those painful teenage years...But I felt your heartache...

[Kiddx]

I like this, i have felt this way before. Wonderfully expressed.

[Marlena]

I liked this, and everything in it is obviously purely emotion, but you need to clean it up. It's kind of choppy, and you used the wrong "you're" in the first line of the third stanza. Good work venting your emotions, though.

[salvador (camuel choisu..]

I'm sorry if i hurt you but it is not my intentions ok, nice words and emotions put into it.

[Warick Ten Bohmer]

Your poetry has inspired a poem of my own, I hope you are able to enjoy reading it. What you have written and what you have been, where you are and where you are going, it's still all able to change.

[J.S. Pua]

a sad write..
i can feel the honesty in this piece..
good work..

[HorrorMaster]

aww very sad poem. I enjoy it.

[Rose Tyler]

You are a wonderful person, and you deserve much more. This is exploding with emotion - sadness, a litte love, even some anger (to me). Good Job with this.

[Patient Poet (Yos)]

Very hones , you deserve more , much more you are so wonderful