Living a life... Full of lies...

Just something on my mind

This life I've been living
Is nothing but simply lies

Nothing seems to be right anymore
When I talk to the one I truly love
He seems to think that I am nothing

Telling me things that make me smile
And then doing other things too
Making me cry as I try to relax
Letting him hear lies from me

I'm hoping that he is lying to me
Since I have been lying to him too
I just hope that things get much better

Maybe some day it will change
Back to what it use to be for us

Is love even real or just a lie

By: Essentia

Author's Note

Just plain random and I hope you like it. =)

Reviews

[Rose Tyler]

There is alot of emotion put behind this like most of your other writings I have read. It makes the reader think about what the writer means by their question at the very end.
Love? Love can be real but it can also be a lie.

[salvador (camuel choisu..]

The emotion is so strong and love the ending that leaves a reader wondering about the question. Great piece of art.

[Warick Ten Bohmer]

Doesn't come across as random to me, or even very poetic. Maybe it's just how I'm reading it. I'd make some changes to the word choice, maybe expand on it a bit more as well. I'll send you an alteration of the above if you like with the changes I would consider making.

The poem itself is able to express how you feel and that is the main point. The question isn't is love real, the question is what is love? It is real but sometimes it's not always what you think you have, or it's not what the other person is expressing for you. In that essence love can be a lie if someone has decided to lie about how they feel or if they don't know how they feel and just say that because it's expected of them.

I don't like it but don't hate it. You have written better and room for improvement. Always is room for improvement no matter how perfect it seems, it's the same with anything. Hope you appreciate my honesty, because that's all I'll ever give.

[DeadToTheWorld]

Love is real no matter what happens it is real from the smallest form to the biggest it's like a flower you plant it,water it,let it grow :) and in between you find a friend a love to hold onto :) someone that will cherish you and treat you right you break up with someone and you find a new one :) I love this poem it is very. . .full of words :)