The Room

She spans the contents of the room.

A dresser big enough to hold a chintzy ‘his and hers’ sweater collection….

Drawers with plenty of room for the s**t that should go in drawers…

Bookshelves lined with artifacts, graced by the presence

of Neruda, Tolle, Dass, and National Geographic…

Tapestry covered walls

Photos

Mirrors

Shoe basket full of- well, shoes

Potted plant

Stack of magazines

Glass of water

Lamp

And the bed…

Four poster

Covers pulled back

Made of brass

Pillows stacked high

And utterly void of him.

 

It’s a room full of things and still completely empty.

A room full of color but lacking any sign of life.

Or is it…the potential for something different?

 

Reviews

[Scott Free]

Oh very good, this was an enjoying and vivid read.
The end was so nice...it didn't end like a woman just stuck on the old things, but her moving on to the new. Good job!
One thing that is just my preference; the line 'And the bed...' is displaced so much to the right that I missed it until I read the story again. Now, if you want it to be a side-thought, that's fine, but if it's really part of the poem I think you should connect it with the rest, so it's not lonely out there.
That was all--I thought this was really polished, great job!

[Céce]

Oh wow, Leslie, this is chock-full of imagery and memories. I agree with Scotty about the end, it's nice to have a poem that is bittersweet, but at the same time, open to whatever will come next. Gorgeous, gorgeous little write here. I look forward to reading more of your poetry soon.

-Jane

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Oh Leslie... the vivid details of the room were terrific and throw you off to the twist... the deep emotional pain of showing how everything is nothing when love is gone... the end is also intriguing showing that maybe life is not totally over just takes a new coarse.

[Caleb Benton]

I love it!!! Detailed to the point that it focuses you on the room then drops a bomb on your mind when you find out the room sucks he's gone. But is he gone for a reason? Maybe the room is supposed to be empty so that you can find a new life to fill it with? Great write sis, you are truly awesome.