not quite superman.

Written June 15th. For creative writing. I don't really know what to say about this one. Kaitlin named it for me.

you say:
you feel things too strongly,
and care too deeply,
and sometimes you don't want to think.

i think:
you break my heart with every word you give.
but i can't save you,
because i can't even save myself.

you talk:
of past suicides that never happened,
of chemical reactions,
of little things that hurt my soul.

i know:
you make me sadder than anyone i’ve ever met;
make me wish i could cradle your head to my chest,
whisper, everything will be all right,
just give it another night.

and i wish:
that i could be there--
the little girl wanting to heal the broken wing
of the bird that fell from her sky too soon,
innocent child in a warm june noon.
the superman cape is tied around her neck—
but she doesn’t know the world quite yet. 

Reviews

[Indigo Blue Skies]

I really like this piece- and your style of writing.

Most recent poetry is not worth taking the time to read nor the effort spent on writing it, but your work is solid. A good majority of the poems I've read here center on writing about one specific thing or another and focusing on rhyming instead of flow, so it's good to read something that is far beyond the level of middle school poetry notebooks :P

Also - I love that it tells a story. That's all ^_^

[deeps]

I really like this one.
I found it emotional
Very well worded and written.

[M.S Solis]

The tenderness and the way it progresses is so good.
Great poem!

[bluessadmood]

This was so nice ,so tender in words and feelings..especially at the end
You make me sad and wish I could cradle your head to my chest
Whisper things would be right again,if you give it another night
Wish I could be there to heal the broken wing of the bird
That fell from the sky,too soon ,an innocent child in a warm June
A superman cape around her neck,but does not know the world ,quite yet
lovely write..

[Brittany]

I had a little bit of trouble understanding it? I think it's a cool style of writing though. Just a little confusing...