(hakiu) Stealing a phrase

i was smoking a cig outside and i came up with this one

 

 

Stealing a Phrase

 

I jumped off a bridge

everyone else

Jumped too

Author's Note

so dumb but i think it kinda lets your mind wonder a little bit....... thats what i was trying to do....... and i saw this pic and its soooooooo rediclous i had to put it on........... its from the boston Hearld but i wrote this before i saw the pic........

Reviews

[C.B.]

Such a trend setta, obviously. You should write more so I can read it. KTHX

But yeah, this is interesting, it's not a conventional haiku, but whatev, you make your own rules. I like the idea, of course, that whole "If she jumped off a bridge would you?" that parents berate their children with when they begin to conform. After all, either you follow trends or set them.

[ODMK {Oliver D.M King]]

I think I am ADHD so reading this was awesome! I liked it, not dumb at all bud. Good job!

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

lol i love it .. my mom always used the saying ' if everyone jumped off a bridge would you' I had to think before i answered ...well i guess people do jump with everyone else.. lol mind id wondering and wandering.. lol

Chloe

[Brianna Brie]

Usually a haiku has 5-7-5 syllables, but from what I read that is not an absolute. Can appreciate the different twist you put to a saying often heard. Yes, it does make you think.

[Valentine]

Are you sure you have the proper amount of syllables in each line? It seems a bit different than other I have read and I am no expert on this type verse..God bless..Valentine