Cigarettes

this is one of those tricky poems. If you figure it out then write it in the review... it has a secret meaning i hope you pick up on that

 

Cigarettes

 

I see cigarettes walking around the block

The 72’s short and sturdy with confidence

The menthols, paper loose hanging low 

Always ready to give you that minty but satisfying taste

Light 100’s annoying

Always stay around way to long

Putting them out however is a sin

Which results in poor judgment

 

There is always that one cigarette

That spews more arsenic and rat poisoning

Then most nicotine sticks

Wrapped in a nice silver and green box

Until you open the cardboard

And realize you got your self into something

That was just for the flashy packaging

 

A perfect cigarette white the whole way across

The filling perfect in the most slender kind of way

The tobacco just absolutely satisfying

Mentally physically and spiritually

A parliament light if I want to get

Politically correct

The recessed filter hides the shame inside

Finding the perfect cigarette you bust out the

Bic motorcycle lighter.

In an endless addiction you try to

Flame up your f*g

But for some UN godly reason

It refuses to join you in harmony

In a madness of rage you accidentally snap

Your parliament in your hand

Leaving you unsatisfied and miserable! 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

hollllla at your boy

Reviews

[Nik Dendera]

Christ, you've made me want a f*g and I haven't smoked for 9 months!! Bah!

Great piece, though.
"Wrapped in a nice silver and green box Until you open the cardboard And realize you got your self into something That was just for the flashy packaging" I loved that part! Reminds me of a nasty brand I used to smoke...

As for the hidden meaning... I kind of have an idea, but I'm probably wrong! I usually am! My own interpretation is normally way off centre.

But, like I said, this was a great piece!

[C.B.]

Gotta say, this made me laugh. My mom smokes parliaments. The recessed filters always confused me.

Anyway, about the poem itself, I enjoyed it. I enjoy poetry that tells a story, especially when it makes me laugh, and also, I love the enormous hyperbole you put into it. "The tobacco just absolutely satisfying Mentally physically and spiritually" That's perfect.

If there was a hidden meaning, I'd agree with Jenny D and say you were referring to women. But I kind of like it as a literal piece. I don't know.

[Jenny Davis]

I read this as being the many types of women...when they yell they are poison- when they reject, you want to snap them...I'm not sure if I'm right...but either way, cool piece :)

[An Ordinary Woman]

This is way cool, very well written and loads of fun but heck if I can figure out the puzzle. I enjoyed the atmosphere of this, very relaxing. Like I just smoked a ciggy. LOL Maybe that is the puzzle part.

Do tell.

[Dead Monster]

This is very well
I give you an A+ back

[Bubo]

This is great.........loved all the wored play........and the imagary, of course you could be talking about
people as well as cigarettes.........I got so engrossed in the flow and words I missed any puzzle anyway!
Sorry!!
Great imagination though!

[Steve Thompson]

Nice piece there cigs man, a gift from hell, solid work

[Damian Alan Gray]

Nice work! However, although I consider myself relatively intelligent and a lover of puzzles, I'll be damned if I can figure out the "hidden meaning." But, I'll venture a guess that it has something to do with dating in the modern city? ... No, that's not right. Damn. Please reply, because this is going to drive me crazy. Thanks.

[Kitten]

love the imagery :)