Cigarettes

this is one of those tricky poems. If you figure it out then write it in the review... it has a secret meaning i hope you pick up on that

 

Cigarettes

 

I see cigarettes walking around the block

The 72’s short and sturdy with confidence

The menthols, paper loose hanging low 

Always ready to give you that minty but satisfying taste

Light 100’s annoying

Always stay around way to long

Putting them out however is a sin

Which results in poor judgment

 

There is always that one cigarette

That spews more arsenic and rat poisoning

Then most nicotine sticks

Wrapped in a nice silver and green box

Until you open the cardboard

And realize you got your self into something

That was just for the flashy packaging

 

A perfect cigarette white the whole way across

The filling perfect in the most slender kind of way

The tobacco just absolutely satisfying

Mentally physically and spiritually

A parliament light if I want to get

Politically correct

The recessed filter hides the shame inside

Finding the perfect cigarette you bust out the

Bic motorcycle lighter.

In an endless addiction you try to

Flame up your f*g

But for some UN godly reason

It refuses to join you in harmony

In a madness of rage you accidentally snap

Your parliament in your hand

Leaving you unsatisfied and miserable! 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

hollllla at your boy

Reviews

[Nik Dendera]

Christ, you've made me want a f*g and I haven't smoked for 9 months!! Bah!

Great piece, though.
"Wrapped in a nice silver and green box Until you open the cardboard And realize you got your self into something That was just for the flashy packaging" I loved that part! Reminds me of a nasty brand I used to smoke...

As for the hidden meaning... I kind of have an idea, but I'm probably wrong! I usually am! My own interpretation is normally way off centre.

But, like I said, this was a great piece!

[bourgeois hippy]

Ah, cigarettes. Where would our metaphoric genius come from without such deadly best friends co-existing with our lives? Great poem, I woulda used a Zippo to light her up though ;)

[Barbara Walker]

Interesting use of cigarettes as metaphor! Some good imagery here, very descriptive! Conveying thoughts about women is what instantly came to mind, though I was a bit thrown by the last couple of lines! Then, it became...in your hand, but, I doubt that a bit, so maybe I am wrong about the women?? I still think it's a great metaphor for women or people, in general! Barbara eyepoetress

[chris]

such a nice poem abut cigarettes , i preffer camel lights or marlbros

[chris' girlfriend]

wow thats sooo cool!!!! :)
i love it ^_^

[~crazy Beautiful~]

this was very interesting
i see a metaphor of a corporate like world
suit and ties
the american image
maybe i am wrong
but i enjoyed this piece anyways
nice work
thank you for entering my contest

[Jeff Loquist]

Reminds me of my grandfather. He smoked Parliament and he seemed to hate them but never switched. Thanks for the memory.

[justjenn_2u]

I know the cigs that you speak of, the horrible ones, made from the floor scrapings. Sure way to make anyone quit, smoke enough of them!!! Nice flow. Interesting topic you chose to write about. I sense an intriguing mind.

[Beyond the Beat]

Good poem that leaves others to see as they wanna see.. I see this not about cigarettes, but that of everyone walking about dressed in the same suits and ties , going to work at the same time and performing functions like hamsters on treadmills, all uniform and correct but waiting to be burned by societies moguls, but if you're the one in a thousand who dares to confront society with a different viewpoint, although you may dressed in the same vogue as your neighour, then your gonna be looked at with suspicion, and pushed and pulled until you conform and lie broken, like everyone else who works for the mortgage and family... yet your ideals will stay forever true at the front of your mind, ...until tomorrows rat race begins again.

Al
Living ..beyond the beat!

[THE BLACK SEAL]

parliament yucchh lol i like captain black little cherry cigars...lol good write and i can see your passion for the vice

[Rain]

I was thinking you were talking about some women I've known. I liked the piece. Now Pcchampions sound awesome, plus bring on St Pierre, and my cat Randy " The Natural". Boxings dead..Ooops, your piece..whatever your intent, I liked it. Rain..