Haiku #2

Something sensory

A clothesline unfurls:

Pastel shades against grey skies;

Upon a cliff’s edge.

Reviews

[Great Aunt Astri]

I had to read this a few times to 'get the picture' And, if I am right, you have written a very clever Haiku.

I see the clothes line as the edge of the cliff, the pastel clothes are hanging on the 'edge', and the grey skies beyond? Well, to me , that is the 'future' waiting to be coloured, as long as the clothes don't fall over the cliff! To me, that is a wonderful way of putting something very universal!

[Lee Bakes]

I have to say though that you've made a very interesting comment here and it does make a point. thank you for reading. :) its interpretations like this that I wait for and cherish!

[Great Aunt Astri]

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[alanwgraham]

Hi Lee, in a few short words you have caught something indefinable that communicates more than the sum of the words. I remember seeing a painting by Goya of a part of a dog showing behind a earth bank. (I think from his dark period which may be significant). The painting is of nothing but somehow it seems to encapsulate everything. I can't explain why but your little poem reminded me of this.
Thanks,
Alan

[Lee Bakes]

As always alan you are so perceptive! I am grateful to have someone as talented as you read my stuff!!

[Warrior]

Adding the description of the skies being grey makes me imagine more about the poem. Good job.

[Lee Bakes]

Thanks for reading B-Law. You're right, that is why i added the color grey to the poem!