Those in Glass Houses

This originally started out as a rap, and personally, I think that it sounds better if you rap it, but that's just my personal opinion.

The world that we live in

today makes me sick.

It's all about money

and hoes getting dick.

 

What would happen if suddenly,

it wasn't all about you?

It'll be like that eventually

when the price of life pays it's due.

 

Let's take a look into the eyes

of a small little girl.

She sat, watched and cried

as drugs ruined her world.

 

"Daddy stop!" she'd beg

as he lights up another.

She knows that soon,

he'll be beating her mother.

 

He'll beat them both 'till he's tired

of his sick little game.

Little girl cuddles her mother

who's heavy with shame.

 

Listen to my words

and try to tell me that they're funny.

Can you tell that little girls life

revolves completely around money?

 

It's not about the cash,

who you know or what you wear.

It's about showing your loved ones

that you know how to care.

 

Author's Note

I usually try not to use any vulgar or explitive words, but I'm being a bad poet, and using dick for the first time in any of my pieces >_< Sorry!

Reviews

[TJ]

good message and good piece
don't worry about the swear words, they have thier place in writing and this one was used properly

[She comes, when I call ..]

Wow. this piece is amaaaazing.

[Martha V. C.]

Hello,

This poem reached down to me, you know? It brought out another view in my mind. I'm the kind of person who thinks a lot about life, and it depresses me sometimes. This poem yet proves of my view, and I am extremely impressed with this "Poem/Rap."
I actually rapped..raped..it. Heh, I don't know how to spell that. Anyways, as the rhymes made a bunch of sense. I felt the pain of that little girl even if I haven't been through her experience, but it's very realistic, and I personally believe you did a wonderful job with this work.

[Helpless]

just because you put vulgarity in your poetry doesn't make you a bad poet! i am going to send you one of my poems that i wrote when i seriously pissed at someone one day. lol! you think YOUR the "bad poet". LMAO!!! XD

No seriously, i think this is totally awesome! you rock girl!

[AndyJCash]

That's quite horrific and powerful...I can see why you originally saw it as a rap, it does have that feel about it. Very true though, too many families of the kind the little girls belong to and if only the world was a place where it was easier to help those that needed help and punish those that needed to be punished. Until that world arrives...

[originalazrael]

Aww. That's kinda sad. I wrote a poem too. Wasn't about drugs, but rape.

Kinda makes you sick, this world.