The Call of Society (my first rap!)

If you read it out loud, it's a little more powerful

Why in the world,

are all these people screamin'?
I look to the sky,

and my sun's never beamin'.

 

It seems like nobody

falls in love anymore,

and I'm always asking myself,

who am I living for?

 

The pressure's pulling down,

I'm about to cave in.

I'm in this crazy game for life,

but I can't ever win.

 

Noone can ever look me

straight in the eyes

I don't understand

the "how's " or the "why's"

 

So many questions,

so little time,

so I'm sittin' here spittin'

my pathetic little rhymes.

 

Everyone's trying

so hard to be heard.

But it seems like all

we ever yell at is dirt.

 

So now I'm standin' and shoutin',

man I'm turnin' some heads.

Say that you stoners chose your covers,

now you can lie in your death beds.

 

You can rap about your money,

and the weed that you smoke

but to the others above you,

you ain't nothin' but a joke.

 

Ha-ha, why so serious?

Lighten up, have some fun.

You don't think it's so serious

until you're lookin' into the mouth of  a gun.

 

Drink away your problems,

a blunt makes it O.K.

but where does it all leave you

at the end of the day?

Reviews

[Chris]

Chuckling here...but not AT... with

You had a bit of fun with this one...

[Kevin Horsley]

This one starts quite well about people wanting to be heard but no-ones listening, but then heads into a rant at people who like to get high or drink/drugs...
Not sure about the connection. Maybe it's my old age..lol

[realmwriter]

fo shizzel my nizzel. dizz b da s**t brizzahe!

[Lily Mae]

I love it..great write..:) xx

[roy mccarthy]

this is dope fo sho! lol

[BeccaB]

loving the vibe coming from this its a realy good rap ^_^ well done the rhythem is good aswell and so is the beat you should deffinightly do more of this ^_^

[She comes, when I call ..]

Im actually a rapper, as wierd as that may be. I love words, and warping them to flow in unique patterns. Could we possibly talk about using some of your lyrics on my next CD?
I would of course give full credit on lyrics.