The Final Words

Honestly, at first, this piece seems like just a bunch of random thoughts strung together, but to me, it made sense. :)

Staring at the blank sheet of paper

willing words to come to mind

strong enough

to describe the whirlwind

tearing through my heart.

 

I put up with you for far too long

letting you break my heart

ever so slowely

like chewing broken glass.

 

One night

not a mistake

an excuse

to end what was already over.

 

So here I am

shouting my words

at a crowd of pety stuffed animals.

 

Dancing to music that nobody can hear.

Reaching for images that nobody can see.

Crying for a love that never will be.

Try desperately to keep insanity that never was.

 

I laugh that you couldn't understand.

That you were too busy wallowing

in your own fucked-up self-pity

to realize what truely happened.

 

I'll forgive you

for the mistakes you've made.

The hurt to didn't care enough to mend.

I've always known

that you wouldn't take responsibility in the end.

 

Wasted time and regret

kisses my thoughts.

Laughs it's victory loudly.

I'll forget the empty pain.

Move past your pointless games

and continue putting roses

on the grave of  our dead memories.

 

Saying goodbye to the soldier

who's at war with himself.

Listening to him howl

his lonely love songs

that only I can understand.

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

I bolded and italicized the lines that were my favorite! :D

Reviews

[CharlesMonroe]

"Dancing to music that nobody can hear.
Reaching for images that nobody can see."
I love this stanza most of all :D the whole poem is beautiful and amazing though (: and what you bolded/italicized is kinda like a whole new poem. I love it :D
100/100

[E.V. Black]

You go, girl! You tell that person. I loved this. It's very, VERY refreshing to see someone speak their mind. And, of course, to not be afraid to do it.

"So here I am

shouting my words

at a crowd of pety stuffed animals."

Heh, loved how you just shout at the stuffed animals. I found it amusing.

"Wasted time and regret

kisses my thoughts.

Laughs it's victory loudly.

I'll forget the empty pain.

Move past your pointless games

and continue putting roses

on the grave of our dead memories."

My second favorite stanza. Lyrical paired with refreshing imagery.
I must say that this poem, and your recent review on my piece, have very much made my day. It's not often I come across work that just blows my mind. I love your audacity and your novelty. Keep it up! :)

[PaxtonBelieves~]

AllieBear... this is striking. Loved itXD

[Suzy Q]

I really liked this, there were moments where I kind of didn't understand until I read it again. But as you said on the top, it makes sense to you. And that's all that matters.

[Chloe]

I love how you put two different mindsets together and allow it to be one unique poem. This is really cool although initially, I had thought you bolded the text to make it look more intense. Good job though!

[David Winters]

I like how it has a lot to do with the inside of someones mind. Stuff that exsists in the mind and to this person but to no one else. I like it a lot.

[tigerclaw]

You tugged at my heart strings with these words..love how you brought this piece home..nicely done.