Infinity

If you enjoyed my nice mind boggling piece from yesterday… Here is a more poetic form: on infinity. Enjoy and please review! Thanks!

Infinity is such a large number.

I could count on and on...

And never reach it.

Infinity is such a far away place.

I could soar miles and miles away...

And never arrive at its destination.

Infinity is such a large, far away thing...

That in fact,

Infinity is nothing at all.

Author's Note

What do you think? I would love some constructive feedback!

Reviews

[Nippon Gakkis]

Simple but, yet elegant and truthful

[SteveTarasev]

I like the idea and the majority of this poem very much. A constructive criticism is that the second line in the second paragraph sort of throws the flow off. Maybe something like:
"I could fly on and on
And never reach a destination"
I dunno though. It's your baby and I'm just a banana

[AF]

Thank you so much! I agree that line was a little off, so I just cut out a few words. Does that read a little smoother?

[SteveTarasev]

smoother than a banana smoothie

[Manuel A Hurtado]

The font formatting is very interesting, and I find the near-complete lack of imagery rather unique, as you focus more on the conceptuality of such a concept, and try to wrestle with the "reality" of infinity. Very interesting.

[Drake Kyle]

I've always enjoyed poems like these because they delve into concepts that are impossible to really have a good knowledge of. The author is forced to interpret something, like infinity, and craft something based on that alone. That said, I really like the natural flow of this, the way it sounds when I put a voice to it. It just seems really smooth to me, there's no huge words shoehorned into the verses, everything makes sense. Very nice, I'll have to look at more of your stuff.