I like you standing here

I like
you standing here

topfull with light
wet with darkness

serenaded or sedated
on your heels on your toes

mindful or mind full
of blues or vagary

you with bare feet
you without plans.

I like you every
where the trees grow.

Reviews

[theair]

Thanks Phil, I mistyped that 'your' when I was transferring this piece over. As far as topfull, it *is* a word (http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/topfull), but I can see how it could throw the reader off. Thanks for taking the time.

[Sr.phil]

hello, nice write.
but i found some error, just a few.
first - "topfull" does not fit together, not a word when put together. Must be apart. "top full"
second - grammar error "on you heels on your toes" you probably meant "your heels."
and last, the last two lines, not a great way to end it. I understand its the way you write but it is a weak ending. "I like you every" is a fragment error. Other then that, really nice topic, i like the theme alot.
keep at it.
phil