Monster

Another poem from my crazy mind lol

I am not the man I want to be

So much anger inside of me

Rage and anger is all that I know

Has been with me since I started to grow

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I put on a mask that wears a big smile

Yet my anger burns like a funeral pile

Burning my soul with this heated rage

Must not let my monster out of his cage

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For if I do, you won't like what you see

The raging monster that is really me

So I try to keep that part of me in the dark

But my monster is strong and has left his mark

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Author's Note

not finished but like everything a work in progress

Reviews

[HamonoAkira]

Please complete this. I do not know what motivation you need to complete this but I would like to know how this poem ends. I am seeing anger and darkness and chaos and I feel like the story doesn't have to end there. The poem is both raw yet polished--that makes it more, in a way, magical.

[N. N. Grainger]

Although pertaining heavy themes this poem has rapid fluency caused by the rhyme, I'm not one to discourage rhyming, I'm a fan of the art and therefore find this a vary interesting write.

[Hisou_Tenshi]

Anger makes me sad and I don't like to be sad. It's a circle of sadness and anger. Certainly it is unhuman. Good writing, as usual.

[Rosauro Brillantes]

Reminds me of me

[Bennett Logan]

I think that your monster can easily work as a metaphor for the darkness in all people and can mean any number of things. I especially like how you make no mention of why the monster is a monster... Anyone can read this and use it as a mirror to hold up to themselves and examine their own monster. Really good stuff. Truly.

[EmpressPoetess]

So far, an awesome write, I'm waiting for the completed one!

[Greg Skura]

Great poem! We all can be full of anger, life is not at all like fairy tales that we once read! I see you take your anger and create. Well done!

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

I really like this piece since it I can totally relate. The flow and rhyme are wonderful. Awesome job!!!

Heather

[LonelySoul]

like to see how this one turns out...