Pure Evil

This is a little poem about my evil step father.

An evil man born from a snake

When he yells the room does shake

He was a monster before his fall

Hit his head now his brain is small

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So much anger spews from his lips

Constant waves hitting the ships

Evil, a monster, a demon I see

Lock him up and throw away the key

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How can a man be so bad?

Is he calm or is his brain mad?

All I did was stand up to him

Taking shots off the chin

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He has the power to take my freedom away

Telling lies about me almost everyday

Reviews

[A.r. Bazian]

....
intense... no comment!
something did come over me!

[S.W.]

Wow really had me imagining myself in the feelings you were putting int this poem. Good piece.

[Khaotic Katastrophe]

i like it alot. the part where it says "is he calm or is his brain mad" is my favorite part because to me it shows how someone can be two different people; nice around others but totally different at home. Thanks for sharing

[The High Poet]

Some people find the line "is he calm, or is his brain mad" This line show how he can be 2 different people. Sometimes calm others mad. Thanks for all the feedback

[MissWordSmith]

VERY NICE. GREAT IMAGERY.
i just thought this one line made no sense..! ..
"How can a man be so bad?
Is he calm or is his brain mad?"

where did CALM come from?
it could be something like.. .
How can a man be so bad?
Is he disturbed or is his brain man?

anything.. just put a different word there.. bcs calm just threw me off the flow of this piece..

however, a great write nevertheless with a great idea behind it.

[A.Lee]

Wow, what a powerful poem. Nice imagery.

[Tina Kline]

Sounds like a really mean person. You did a very good job on getting the pain of having to deal with this man across. Nice job!

[Anicca]

This was a wonderful piece and left me with many questions! I thought that the rhyme was strong.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

I like this poem alot. It seemed like it could be the exaggerated point of view of
a kid in someways..but disturbing when viewed from the eyes of an adult.
It reads like the lyrics of late 90's era grudge. This would make a fantastic song.
I love it man!

[Chris Lotus]

Your closer was a pretty decent one. Your imagery is quite stunning and well put with your word usage.