Pure Evil

This is a little poem about my evil step father.

An evil man born from a snake

When he yells the room does shake

He was a monster before his fall

Hit his head now his brain is small

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So much anger spews from his lips

Constant waves hitting the ships

Evil, a monster, a demon I see

Lock him up and throw away the key

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How can a man be so bad?

Is he calm or is his brain mad?

All I did was stand up to him

Taking shots off the chin

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He has the power to take my freedom away

Telling lies about me almost everyday

Reviews

[Greg Skura]

There are many in the world that struggle with their own conscience on a daily basis and unfortunately take it out on the ones they love or care for. All we can do is know in our hearts what the truth is and try to stay at peace in the face of adversity. Peace!

[Taylor H.]

I really liked this. I thought some of the rhymes felt forced but other than that, this was a great poem. I also, felt that it ended to suddenly.

[Andy]

Unfortunately, I think everyone knows someone like this. Good discription of evilness and makes me wonder what there is to learn, or why?
In line #8, is the use of 'through' your intention, or did you mean 'throw'?

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Strong, succinct and telling work. Blessings to you in dealing with such a person. I can truly empathize as I have known people like this as well in my life. Strength to you - it seems in your writing you have it though.
Light,
Siddartha

[Vin]

I really enjoyed reading this. The anger was very clearly described and it flowed great. Good job :)

-Beth

[Aldora Sparrow]

Wow. Powerful through such strong word choice. I could feel some hate churning inside of me because I caught myself and wondered where it came from. This is such a powerful piece that just oozes with hate. Very nice. Good job and keep up the good work!

[Jade (insanity)]

I liked it. And though it was about your step father, I pictured the devil, or atleast someone like him/it. It was true and I liked it. I mean, I thought of it as a little hard to comprehend but that's what I think poetry is all about and I liked it. Great piece. :]
Keep writing,
Jade

[Joy Lynn B.]

wow Iall I can say is again, wow

[Livana Lowell]

I don't really know what to say. I mean, I'm no child of abuse and I just don't acknowledge my step father because he's no one to me. All I can say is that I can't stand it when adults take such advantage of children, stripping them of their own thoughts of this world and giving them gloom and frustration, though strength and wisdom.

Abusive people make me so sick, I can't even say it in words.

N'ways, I like the poem, though. Gave me lots of empathy and emotion, so it's very powerful.

[LonelySoul]

sounds like my ex step dad