The Day I lost my best friend

This is a work in progress, I got a little to emotional to write anymore. Would like to know what you think of it so far. This happened 10 years ago now and I still am having a hard time dealing

The day I lost my best friend

After a four day binge

We both started to cringe

Sleep is what we needed most

Little did I know he was almost a ghost

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I left his house so I could get some sleep

Unknown to me his Reaper came to reap

My friend stopped breathing in his slumber

I had no idea death had his number

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So when I called him the next day 

His mother said I would pay

I was the one that killed her son

She said to me, what have I done

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We got into drugs at the same time

So why am I being accused of this crime

Never had to force him to get high

Together him and I just liked to fly

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I miss you everyday Jay

Author's Note

I have added a few new lines let me know what you think:)

Reviews

[Chris Lotus]

Ah, very good! This one actually has a bit of alarm and stun to it from the added lines. I can still see and feel similar elements as the last version, but this one presents a darker and different scenario, which actually puts an edge on the tone. Overall what im saying is that in this version, we actually gain more knowledge on how and why you feel this way. With or without the added lines its still a great piece, but of course if I had to pick one over the other it would be the newer version. This one will provide the reader with your thoughts and the cause.

[Carrie Montgomery]

I too suffered at the hands of a cruel and hurtful person. was much too young to have had to carry such a burden and you as well. you say this is a work in progress and I say it is off to a great start(strong in rhythm, touching, raw). I hope that when you deem it complete it will offer you solace and healing.

[Greg Skura]

Life is full of choices that bring painful lessons, and sometimes the best, and the strongest fall, to show us that we too have lessons to learn. Pain from the loss of your friend is expressed well in this piece.
As for blame, a parent will never believe that their child is capable of making choices against their own better judgment.
Thank You for sharing your pain!

[mae-mae<3]

I'm sorry...

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

This is such a sad story and oh so often occurs. What a terrible thing his Mother said to you - I am sure it is still very painful but you can not let guilt rule your life. He made his own decisions as well. Nicely penned. A moving write indeed.
Light,
Siddartha

[Jade (insanity)]

I think this is one of my favorites you have written. I liked to emotion behind it and I am very sorry for your loss and I hope that things have gotten better in the 10 years. May your friend rest in peace :]
Great job,
Jade

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This is ..something..which is beyond my comprehension, beyond my words, beyond my thoughts and certainly beyond my review.
It had tears in my eyes, that is all I can say..
I'm sorry for your loss...
would surely read more of you

[Aldora Sparrow]

Wow. As a person who had experienced the loss of two friends in the last month, this really illustrates the shock and pain that I've been experiencing. Someday,I hope, I'll be able to smile and remember the good times without crying so painfully. For now, I'll just grieve and honor their memory. Hope that you can let it go without forgetting. Beautiful

[MissWordSmith]

very sad... drugs suck ya... they may seem like they rock.. but they suck... nice write here... i know what its like to lose a close friend/best friend, and i wish i didn't.

[A.r. Bazian]

losing someone is the most tragic ordeal... especially when one is too close! i lost a bit more than a few ppl, and i still have a problem dealing with it!

i feel you... be well... may he rest in peace!

[Gandré]

so - do we have to see, till we are going to loose you? It's a personal decision, isn't it and I hope everybody knows where drugs are going to take him to. Very sad. Like so many other stories. I wouldn't worry what says his mother - she does not know, she wasn't there. Don't feel responsible for him - but for yourself, now, in this moment.
What is gone, is gone, past is past, when we stop revisiting that place, we feel strength and happiness for we are open for new events of our live. Thank you for sending me your RQ. Perhaps you like to read my poem?