Godsent Trojan Rocking-Horse

Glitter, nervous laughter.

You ring. Your bones

                            empty and

 

in Emptiness:

basket staff net hammer spanner

I cackle like a madwoman

                     when I'm happy.

 

They ring and they rock us.

You ring and rock with them.

In darkness

 

You cannot come

because you never came from anywhere else

 

In utter darkness

Rocking back and forth

                         in utter darkness

someplace.

Reviews

[Shahrier]

its amazing how well this flows, as i said before, i dont personally like vagueness in poems, but you pull it off really well. your diction is marvelous.

[imagination-1234]

Oh thank you! I wanted this to flow, I tried to be quite Ted Hughes-esque here. Like you're inside a Trojan horse but it rocks rhythmically from side to side, all day long...Thank you for your comments!

[Shahrier]

Not sure who ted is, but as I read the poem again today, I can visualize it much more Cleary and the vagueness seem to subside. Its very nice :-)

[imagination-1234]

Thank you. Ted Hughes is a poet who was married to Sylvia Plath. They had a tumultuous relationship and he still wrote poems after his death. This is influenced by lyrical style, really.