Watched

Watched

A Story by Rachel
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Do you ever get the feeling someone is watching you, even if you are alone? Copyright. All content belongs to me.

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Watched

 

         You are standing in the bathroom getting ready for bed one night, when all of a sudden, you feel like someone is watching you. You know the feeling. It’s when you feel a subtle presence weighing you down. When you feel like if you turn around, someone, or something will be behind you, ready to strike. You shake it off, clean up for bed, and switch off the bathroom light. You venture into the kitchen. Everything is dark and quiet. The heavy feeling still follows you. You whirl around, finding nothing. You chuckle sheepishly to yourself. You have no reason to be nervous.

         You reach into the fridge, and pause. What is that shadow lurking in the corner of the kitchen? You quickly flick on a light and the shadow disappears. You sigh in relief. Shut the fridge door. Venture into your room with a cup of water. Creak. What was that? You whirl around. There’s nothing behind you. The heavy feeling fades a little.

         You put the glass of water on your bedside. You know you won’t be able to sleep for a while. You slip into bed anyway. Pull down the covers and slip under them. You nervously glance around, your eyes landing on the closet door. Was that a person lurking behind the door? You flip the bedside lamp off. The silhouette fades. Sighing in relief, you turn over on your back, look up at the ceiling and scream. A face leers back at you. It has spiderlike arms and legs clinging to the ceiling, black holes where eyes should be. The thing leaps down on you. You try to roll off the bed, but it’s too late. The Thing That Watches always is where you least expect it. So, if you are ever in bed, feeling watched, never, ever look up. It hates being seen.           

         

© 2015 Rachel


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The story was good, but could have been more scarier. 90/100

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very well written. I like the voice that you used. Definitely suspenseful, which is hard to do in such a short amount of time. The only thing that I would change is the sentence "So, if you are ever in bed, feeling watched, always take the highest precautions." This to me doesn't flow with the rest of the story. I would at least change the "always take the highest precautions" part, if I were you.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Rachel

9 Years Ago

Thanks, I will change it.
This is a deep write and definitely a nail biter


Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rachel

9 Years Ago

Thank you!
Well its creepy in a good way, well written and really good. You wrote it very well, overall its good.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rachel

9 Years Ago

Thank you!
Ilerah

9 Years Ago

your welcome, always happy to help out.

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Added on April 8, 2015
Last Updated on August 12, 2015
Tags: Horror, Scary, Story, Creepy, Watched

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