Questions

  Will you hate me

  if I decided to leave?

  Will you want me when

  I have nothing to talk about?

  Will it hurt us to see the

  end of the line coming

  to a stop?

  Will it make us sad

  when the bombs fall

  over our heads?

  I don't know the answers

  to these questions right now.

  But I know I'm gonna miss you

  when you go beyond the world. 

Author's Note

i wrote this last night when i was half asleep. i know its a piece of shit. review anyways.

Reviews

[falling_toxic_rain]

for writing when your half asleep, its not bad i must agree. Anyway, the questions make the reader ponder, well written.
you shouldn't think your writing is bad-unless your fishing for a compliment. lol

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

It's not bad. I think it's awesome not gonna lie. :D
Well thanks for sharing. :D

[safeashouses]

It's not a piece of s**t! You've got me really wondering about the stanza, "Will it make us sad/when the bombs fall/over our heads?" I think it could be stronger without "I don't know the answers/to these questions right now" just because the reader already understands that without it being said. I'd like to see an expansion of this poem =)

[Patches I'm not so new..]

wrong it isn't a piece of s--t as you call it--- I suppose it's normal for poets not to particularly like their writings( I know I don't) that is why the cardinal rule for poets is revise revise revise then revise again you, I believe have talent this poem shows a glimmer of it. I really liked the last strophe!

[Bertie]

Simple but effective, you've asked questions which are both highly personal and highly provocative at the same time. The journey of the poem is direct and the words reflect that.
i enjoyed it :)
Well done !