Chapter 1

Chapter 1    Tessa's Point of View

    "Ohhhh Tess, he's so hot."

    "Megan, you say as if I don't know."

    Megan sighed.  "You've never said a word to him."

    "What's there to say? Hey Matt, I'm your next door neighbor.   
Actually, I live across the street.  I spy on you every night because 
the light from your bedroom shines into my window.  By the way, you 
have really hot abs."

    Megan laughed.  "You could say that."

    "Yeah, but I won't."

    "Tessa, you need to take a chance!"

    We sat in silence for a moment.  Then Megan stood up.

    "I have to go.  Promise me you'll advance in the Matt department?"

    "Sure.  Bye!"

    "Bye!"

    What you just read? My friend Megan trying to convince me to talk 
to Matt Strauss, my hot neighbor who lives across the street.  The 
amazing farm boy who drives a Chevy and wears the ridiculously hot 
flannel shirts.  I know, I know, cliché right? Well it's true.
_

    "Tessa! Come inside! I need your help!" my mom called through the 
house window.  I was still sitting outside, watching the Strauss farm.

    "Sure thing mom," I stood up and walked into the kitchen.

    "We need to make some pies for the annual county fair.  I ran out 
of flour and I was wondering if you could find me some more."

    I nodded.  "Did you look in the pantry already?"

    "Yes.  We don't have any in the house."

    "Well I can't drive."

    Mom sighed.  "Tessa I need you to go ask the Strausses."

    I froze.  "The Strausses?" I murmured.

    "Yes."

    "Um... Sure." I flung open the door and ran out.  Standing on the 
porch, I leaned against the house.

    "Well, this is it Tess."  I straightened my shirt and walked 
towards their house.  Reaching the door, I rung the doorbell.  Not 10 
seconds later, it opened.

    Standing there was Matt Strauss.

    Oh Lord.

Author's Note

Okay, so a thanks goes out to my first reader: Sumayya! I know this chapter is short but when I was writing it, I just wanted to get a storyline started. Reviews are appreciated!

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Reviews

[Meat of Dog]

I like the believable dynamic that arose between Tessa and Megan right away. Megan is the one introducing that Matt is attractive, but bugs Tessa about confronting him rather than doing it herself. I can actually relate from a similar friendship that I had in the past, so it roped me in. Also, count on mom to force Tessa and Matt together. I found that humorous, like as soon as she manages to escape Megan’s pushing, she is forced to see him anyways. You ended the chapter in a good place for suspense as well, which is key to getting the reader hooked/ wanting to read more as you post.

Other suggestions:

“What you just read? My friend Megan trying to convince me to talk
to Matt Strauss, my hot neighbor who lives across the street.” This kind of narration is unnecessary. I can see how you want to pinpoint what just occurred, but the reader understands who Matt is in relation to Tessa via the dialog. We don’t need to be told directly because it’s a little distracting.

[Jamie Raintree]

This is a really fun start. The interaction between the two friends reminds me of me and my friends when we were that age, something I think a lot of girls can relate to. I would have liked to see this scene filled out a little with more description to pull the reader into the story. Looking forward to getting to know Matt!