The Pier

The Pier

A Poem by Kenaz
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A personal poem for the one who is my life...

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Before the fall I found my future,
She stood beside a lake of glass,
The sun reflected off the surface,
And carried light onto the lass.

In her eyes I felt a deepness,
Time has never seemed more still,
My broken heart had been so empty,
But on the night I felt it fill.

She stretched her hand I took it slow,
Her hand fit mine just like a glove,
I kissed her then out on the pier,
And for the first time I felt love.

Two more summers came and went,
Then slower winters passed us by,
But here we are out on this pier,
And I won't ever leave your side.

Every time I see this place,
I will only see your eyes,
Feel the sunlight on my face,
And your lips opposed to mine.

If I had a single dream,
I would dream for you to stay,
To bring me back out to the pier,
And love me like you did that day.

One day when we're old enough,
The sun will sink beneath the sky,
We'll come here to recite our vows,
And sing our daughters lullabies.

© 2013 Kenaz


Author's Note

Kenaz
The music is "Liz on Top of the World"- I added it because frankly it is beautiful and it reminds me of that moment



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A very mesmerizing, heartfelt lyrical write. I really enjoyed it and had no other choice but to add it to my favorites. Bravo!

One tiny suggestion:

The point of view changes from the beginning to end. It start from third person and ends at first person. It's a bit bothersome.

Other than that, brilliant work!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kenaz

11 Years Ago

Thank you friend, though I think you'll find the point of view is homogeneous; it is the tense that .. read more



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You articulate beauty so well and consistently. Great job and great work! The ending left me breathless really!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Kenaz

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much!
Very sweet and romantic. "and feel your lips opposed to mine" Needs to be shorter. Touching poem though

Posted 11 Years Ago


Kenaz

11 Years Ago

That it does...maybe taking out the verb in the second part "feel the sunlight on my face, and your .. read more
A lovely romance poem. Thank you for sharing...:)...............

Posted 11 Years Ago


Kenaz

11 Years Ago

thanks for reading
Sami Khalil

11 Years Ago

You are welcome...:)....................
One day when we're old enough,
The sun will sink beneath the sky,
We'll come here to recite our vows,
And sing our daughters lullabies.

Lovely to have that special place. Lovely ending to this beauty-filled poem.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Kenaz

11 Years Ago

Yes indeed, on the shores of the Eerie
This is a very romantic poem about a chain of events that haunts a place, a pier. This emotionally charged pier has the power to turn back the clock to an extraordinary experience. We all know of such places.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Kenaz

11 Years Ago

thanks for dropping in
Oh my goodness! This is breathtaking! One of the most romantic poems I have ever read...
Practically brings tears....
I enjoyed the rhythmic flow, and the rhyming is immaculate. Love this! xx :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Kenaz

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much. Love is rampant in my writing; I have had good luck :)
Robbie~xoxo~

11 Years Ago

It's my pleasure, I look forward to reading more of your art...so glad you're fortunate to find love.. read more
Kenaz

11 Years Ago

No hurries
A very mesmerizing, heartfelt lyrical write. I really enjoyed it and had no other choice but to add it to my favorites. Bravo!

One tiny suggestion:

The point of view changes from the beginning to end. It start from third person and ends at first person. It's a bit bothersome.

Other than that, brilliant work!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kenaz

11 Years Ago

Thank you friend, though I think you'll find the point of view is homogeneous; it is the tense that .. read more
I've read this one three times, when I was underway, and each time it gave me new sentiments....
"She stood beside a lake of glass" interesting wording, for me, it means, or the lake is frozen, or there is a metaphorical glass kind of wall in between, so you can't reach her."

You're reaching out in this persona, to your beloved, I think that's what the second and third stanza's say. I think your love is "the fall" and that you call her a "she" is brilliant.

I would wonder in what season this children (daughters) would be (have been) born, then....
Nice ponderings there, overall a beautiful seasonal poem, of love, life, and happiness.

- Elisa



Posted 11 Years Ago


Kenaz

11 Years Ago

Thanks E.L. The lake is smooth like glass, meaning that all is still, as if time had stopped. Not to.. read more

11 Years Ago

Thanks for explaining that particular piece of English idiom to me! grateful!
Adore this passionate and amorous piece.
I have not enough words to characterize this.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Kenaz

11 Years Ago

You are too kind
zainul

11 Years Ago

I am very pleased to listen to the song of your passionate heart.
Before the fall... Hmmm?
I have fallen too... We all have.
Yet at times, when we stumble we drop our most precious gifts and we loose the power or trust to hold them again...
I hope your dreams come true and she will again trust you with her kiss at the end of the pier...
If this is a true IRL story you have my deepest and sincerest sympathies.
If not, the poetry is moving either way.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Kenaz

11 Years Ago

Time and distance have pulled us apart, but I'm hopeful that things will work out. Trust is the most.. read more
 David Scott

11 Years Ago

Good luck...
I often wonder how hard to pursue fate or let it happen.
I tend to fight l.. read more
Kenaz

11 Years Ago

I'm just holding on for dear life

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