THE WOODS ARE DARK AND DEEP

run for your life

Run
Don't look back
Stop
Stay low...stay quiet
OK, look back...stay still
Flashlights...I see them
Voices...I hear them
Run now...wait...
Move fast...stay quiet
Go...

Too much noise
Too many branches...too many sticks
They're gonna know where I am
Look back
Wait...where are the lights?...where are the lights?
Stay quiet
Don't breathe
Wait...
Lights...one.two...three
Still far away
Keep going...
Stay quiet...

Stop...
What is that noise?
Sounds like... cars
Cars driving by on the road
Can't see..too dark
I can hear it
Run to the noise...
Run faster
Don't look back
I can see the road ahead
I'm going to make it
Oh no...
(I trip and fall to the ground. I'm in pain...I really hurt myself)
I roll over on the ground...
Lights...in my face
One.two...three

"Please...no"
I hear a gunshot and then...

Author's Note

My first attempt at writing a suspense thriller

Reviews

[YoungWriter.]

Beautiful in a creepy haunted way, i really like it (:

[Ghost writer]

That's good, it's kinda creepy and ryhmey

[Riddhi]

This was an amazing writing...I loved the suspense that it had within it...I can feel the uncertainity to stand still or to run...The end was also mysterious for me..I am still thinking what happens next..I was totally into it as I read it..You are indeed a great writer..
Keep writing..

[.]

It's a beautiful poem! As a first attempt can't be perfect, I will expect even better in future. You just need to place a relation between every stanza. Otherwise, the words used are quite well, powerful. Congrats for this creation and keep sharing your creative skills here.

[LKBillips]

Oooh got my heart racing on this one. I could feel the indecision on when to stand still and when to run. Very suspenseful indeed. Nice Work KC!!

[Emily]

For a first attempt at writing a suspense thriller this was amazing! I definitely wasn't ready for it to end and it kept me intrigued the whole time! Great job!

[Chris Shaw]

Your attempt to keep the reader in suspense worked. This reader felt there was a chase on. I wanted more when the poem finished. On a different note, maths teacher? Go and do your homework lol. (never, especially with maths).

Chris

[sette]

actually the ending of the poem just keeps me in suspense.. what's next?

[light and ashes]

I was pulled through in suspense from beginning to end. I even gasped a little at the end. A good read, although could use a little bit of work (not much just a tweak) I enjoyed reading this.