Flying Freedom

A poem done for my Research/Composition class.

I wish I was free

To soar through the trees

And spread tattered wings and fly.

 

I wish to let go

Of all troubles and woe

And reach up towards the sky.

 

I kick away the birdcage

I’ll turn my own page

And nothing will hold me back.

 

I can fly away

Gliding past the grey

 This confidence; I’ll never lack.

 

Just as I had wished to be

I am Finally Free.

Author's Note

First poem i've done that I actually kinda like.
Advise and contructive critism will be well appreciated.

Reviews

[Tony]

Highly motivational write-- I like the direction you took this one-- very liberating as well.

[:)]

I think this is awesome for a first poem you really like. It took me a long long time to look at my poems and not smell super stink!

I love this and I hope you keep that confidence wherever you go and see through the bruising people will place on you both on purpose as well as not.

xo and smile!

[Daydreamer54]

I loved this and i love the 1st staanza it's my fave! Wat a great poem about independence and wishing to be free. We all feel this way @ times! great write! :)

[Wolfwind Words]

Overall I think this is really good. I don't know about using the term "Whoa" That distracts from the rest of the piece for me. But the form and flow carries the images just fine in my opinion.

Great Ink!
Wolfie

[H-Jonesy]

hm i like it, it could use some work like to me the flow is just a tad off, but other than that i truly liked it. very good jobXD keep it up^^

[Deepshikha]

Oh, this is so pretty!
Just one thing...I think the 'now' in your 3rd stanza, 2nd line could fly away too, and the poem would be even more flowy.
I dunno, but it sounds like you're writing in haiku...only a bit though.