Flying Freedom

A poem done for my Research/Composition class.

I wish I was free

To soar through the trees

And spread tattered wings and fly.

 

I wish to let go

Of all troubles and woe

And reach up towards the sky.

 

I kick away the birdcage

I’ll turn my own page

And nothing will hold me back.

 

I can fly away

Gliding past the grey

 This confidence; I’ll never lack.

 

Just as I had wished to be

I am Finally Free.

Author's Note

First poem i've done that I actually kinda like.
Advise and contructive critism will be well appreciated.

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

It is a nice poem... Well penned.

[Muse]

Yuu should like this....it's a very pretty poem. A bit cliche, but it's still very poetic in its simplicity.

[JEWLDUST]

oh how freedom is so sweet and wonderful isnt it.

[Jamie-Lynn]

I Love it, certainly not the style I'm tend to lean towards, but that's probably because I can write in only one style, lol.
It's simplistic yet written beautifully, well done.

[Anicca]

I like this... Everything suggests its about a bird but my guess is its not at all, maybe its about growing up and becoming independent? But then again maybe thats just my interpretation.

Personally, I would have preferred it if the last stanza had been 3 lines like the others but maybe thats just me.

A wonderful write that flows beautifully.

Thanks for sharing.

[Rossen]

looks and sounds really good!!



maybe you mean woe

[Cricket Kidd]

I do like it, but in the second stanza, I think you mean "Wo", Not "Whoa".
Other than that, I love it! (Plus, I like how you wrote about yourself in third person on your profile. it made me laugh.)

[MandaBear]

nice peom kinda makes me want to fly. good job

[salvador (camuel choisu..]

well what can i say i really enjoyed this work of art. great job.