Is it a crime?

Is it a crime,

For wanting to

Be happy again?

Is it a crime,

For wanting to

Speak what you feel?

Is it a crime,

To want to

Be yourself

All the time?

Is it a crime,

For trying to

Make your dreams

Come true?

Is it a crime,

To cry over

The loved ones

That has passed

Away so suddenly?

Is it a crime

For trying to

Protect the ones

You love too?

No, it’s not a crime to be what you want.

No, it's not a crime to be happy.

No, it's not a crime for trying to make dreams happen.

None of these things are a crime.

Don't let people cloud your mind saying these things are crimes, cause they’re not crime

Reviews

[Paul]

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1/31/2020
9:46 AM U.S.A. MST
This review content authored by PB Jacobs (www.writerscafe.org).
My review content of "Is it a crime?," by tarah morris.

Hey, Bukko!

I kind of agree with you, but what about the jarhead types who just don't listen, Tarah? I wonder about this all the time!

It's neato poem content, nonetheless. I'm a live type, so essentially what I do and say is lived, except when life get's off kilter, tarah.

Dam puddytat's!

Way to see you getting into writing!

Yeah, it's a menial review, content and volume-wise, in way's, but I'm just getting started for the day. Gotta have my sandwich, tarah... Then, we'll see. Sure wish I had a few cups of coffee. We'll see what comes along... As you can see, I get your content, but, it's a kind of...

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PB Jacobs

[alanwgraham]

Good Tarah. I like the simple structure and strong message in your poem. I'm not entirely convinced that your section at the bottom is necessary because I think we all draw that conclusion from the first part. In any case the format of the two sections looks a bit clumsy together -perhaps you could try the first part centred as well.
I hope you don't mind these comments - I have benefitted myself from constructive comments.
Regards,
Alan

[tarah morris]

Thank you alanwgraham I was just have a rampage and threw it together cause everyone in my family thinks everything is a crime these days

[Relic]

A poem that needed saying. I commend you. :)