chapter 10

" Why , Jaz? " Tommy said " Tell me right now why i should'nt go and kill that Quinn b*****d ."

" Because , I'll die  if he's killed ."

" Damnit! , I forgot about that Jazzie "

"Jazzie ? " Kaleo asked still leaning against the wall .

" Shut up ! " Tommy and Jaz both replyed .

(Going back to the conversation the siblings left to yell at Kaleo .)

"It's fine just don't bother him , He'll kill you ,Tommy."

" What ? he is'nt that powerful ."

" Tommy , he's the fith most powerful vampire in the world ."

" No , thats not possible , I know for a fact he is'nt that powerful ."

" Yes, Tommy he is that powerful . "Jaz said walking closer to Tommy

"How would you know Jaz?"

"Tommy, I've spent about a month at his place . How much time have you spent with him ?"

None . Tommy replied

" My point exactly" Jaz smirked .

" Fine , so where are you guys headed?"

" Back ." Kaleo offered

"Oh well thats helpful. " Tommy said sarcasticly

 

Author's Note

I started this as a fiction write where i had no idea who any of the characters were, i didn't even think i was going to have calla in this story , but she's become the entire reason for this story to exist . I thought about who Kaleo was for weeks before i even introduced him into the story , I'm thinking about doing branch off books revealing who the characters really are and how they all meet and seem to know each other , but before i start that i want your opinion , should i reveal who the characters are ,should i unmask them or should i let you, the reader, decide how they came to be who they are now ?

Reviews

[CrimsonBlaze]

Make it tricky for us, that's what I say. I mean just saying it out loud generally is kind of well, boring or just..too dry. I mean maybe give out hints, or put out one piece of the puzzle at a time for us to put together. But don't make it too confusing, because if you leave us to come up with their lives, it's gonna be all jumbly and messed up. So maybe place a piece at a time, or even better hints that we can easily infer. I have to say, I love your characters. Although the name "Tommy" is well known, names like Jazlyn and Kaleo are rare (at least to me) and Calla, makes the characters pop out, and gives them a bit more of an insight. But when you go back to the past, I suggest put a couple of gaps, lines, or just place it in another chapter ..