eyes too old in a face too young

Ocean storms

Pain ,fear

eyes too old

in a face too young

if you looked at her

from a far

she's a normal happy girl

but close up
she's depressed

she feels as though

she's ahundred and one

eyes rung out from tears

too many tears in two little years

happy outside

horrible inside .

eyes too old

in a face too young.

In a face too young .

Author's Note

yes i did mean to put the same line twice in the end.

Reviews

[Ranger Nadaly]

Your good. But you need to learn to reread your work. There are grammatical, sentencing errors in a couple of your pieces. I feel like your writing comes off rushed. You have skill, so use it.
You also write through sarcasm and angst a lot of the time, which I can tell you I do too.
But it can get old so try and do something a little different.