The Moon is lame you exclaim

The moon is on the wane

But you laugh and blame,

Taking Lord’s name in vain.

I claim how high I aim

I'm like a tigress that is tame

But you laugh just the same,

Hold my face in your hands and frame

In your kiss…

My old flame

And I’m your Dame

 

Reviews

[smilempsn]

Nice rhyming..
and sequence of event after event poem

[Mariam]

thanks for your kind review!

[Criss ;)]

Great, it's nice to read or to scream in mind....lol, it's great write, i love to read such kinda pieces...short one;s......you've dropped here a well penned piece, there's no need to add more i think it's good to read, your rhymin' way's good.....
i'm glad to read this stuff here,
well written, well captured here,

have a nice writin;
have this 94.8/100 :)

take care........!!

[Mariam]

thanks for stopping by)

[Trigorin]

Not bad. The rhyme scheme is a little grating after a while but this doesn't take itself very seriously, which is nice, so that doesn't really matter. Good imagery in this, but I feel you could have expanded a bit more.

[Mariam]

oh thanks a lot for your kind review and stopping by! You are right, I want to expand it.