Within living memory

Within living memory

A Poem by Mariam

Don’t rhyme my tears, portray cheerful smiles,

They may look so forced, barefaced lies.

Kissing your glance and due heart’s allegory,

I stand near breathless, within living memory.

© 2013 Mariam


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Kissing your glance, Wow!

Fun how tight thoughts tie together so well...well done.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mariam

11 Years Ago

very glad that you like)
Beautifully conveyed , like your style.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mariam

11 Years Ago

thank you)
Each short statement with reason and purpose in this poem. No wasted words or emotion in the poem. We can be held breathless and wishing for things lost often in a life. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


Mariam

11 Years Ago

thanks for reading and your wonderful review :)
Love this :) you know I am your fan :) i like your style of writing it is some sort of classic and eloquent piece. keep writing!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Mariam

11 Years Ago

thank you again!:) glad you like
Forced rhymes, but still it works here. Great piece, can be interpreted in different ways. Love it!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Mariam

11 Years Ago

thanks for a kind review)
Great phrasing, interesting turns:

They may look so forced, barefaced lies.
Kissing your glance and due heart’s allegory

And this is your 3rd language?

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mariam

11 Years Ago

yep :)
I really like your style, makes for an intense read, full of resonance and wonder... Thank you for sharing!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Mariam

11 Years Ago

Thank you for an encouraging review :) happy that you like.
This is great Mariam . You have done a good job...:)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Sami Khalil

11 Years Ago

Hahaha. I can't see but I will take your words...Just kidding...:)
Mariam

11 Years Ago

hahaha:) anyways...thank you
Sami Khalil

11 Years Ago

You are welcome. I'll visit more often...:)
I like this. You should expand it!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Mariam

11 Years Ago

thank you for reading ...It's difficult for me to write about love, but I may try :)
Cookie

11 Years Ago

You should. I think it'd be worth it.
Mariam

11 Years Ago

thanks for encouraging :)
You have a good concept and I think the brevity works for you here, but some of your language is just a tad stilted and odd. Perhaps look over this a little more closely?

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mariam

11 Years Ago

Thanks!I appreciate your review, perhaps I'm odd too. I agree with your opinion about the language.... read more
Trigorin

11 Years Ago

The part that stood out the most to me was the second line. I feel like it would make more sense if .. read more
Mariam

11 Years Ago

I see thanks a lot, very nice of you.I should think of it...

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Added on March 17, 2013
Last Updated on March 17, 2013
Tags: love, romance

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