You Achieved an Addiction

You can't help those who won't help themselves.

I've changed; no longer can you label me insane.

My beauty emerging, was it worth that cocaine?

When all you've achieved is an addiction.

Your hair matted, and beard full

Was giving me up, expensefull?

I see all you've achieved is an addiction.

No way to pay your bills

All your money invested in those pills

Are you proud, that all you’ve achieved is an addiction?

 

I desire your wellbeing.

Please, except my care

My mind is constantly aching

To assist you and repair

This path isn’t appeasing

Yet, I can only warn you beware.

Reviews

[No]

i know the horrors of addiction and the pain and disgust you must be feeling as a victim of this person's (whoever it my be) disease. it is truly heartbreaking to watch someone you care about waste their life away on something you find so meaningless. my heart breaks each time i come across another.
touching, lovely way with words, i hope you continue doing what you're doing.

[Jonathan Bryant Dean]

I have suffered personal battles with addiction, and I can tell you that it is not as nice as you have it sounding here.

As for some of the comments in the other reviews, I cannot say that such a subject matter is at all cool, awesome of the best ever.

Only a person with a drug in their name would call this touching, and be fine with that.
If you ever write a poem about addiction, and someone tells you it is touching, then you have not portrayed the true nature of addiction.

[Sseoni]

What an amazing poem! It's so sad when someone you love discovers drugs and becomes addicted. You expressed the feelings and emotions very well in your poem! :D

[An owl on the moon]

Vivid mix, with powerful structure. Your work is brilliant, but in dealing with addictions you may wish to become more gritty and raw... Awesome write!

Craig

[Last Lying Look]

This was amazing. I loved the rhyming and the overall message you got across in so few words.
This piece was really great. I love that line:"Are you proud, that all you've achieved is an addiction?"
It's so powerful and biting. It really is brilliant. Excellent poem! I'm adding it to my favorites :D

-Elissa :)