Revealing

Sort of a Part 2 of "Forbidden"...

I've tried writing this piece before,

There was so much more

My thoughts shall be censored no more

The thought of such makes my heart ache

With unsaid words

I shall no longer hold down

The things I feel

The things that bombard my mind

I know all too well how that feels

Now is the time for it all to come unbound

I already know

That there is no hope

For anything more than mere looks

Nothing more than a friendship

Not one little slip

But, I still feel myself drawn

To the beautiful things inside him

My thoughts are all horrid sins

All stupid little wishes

At least he doesn't know...

Right...

He is so kind

I talk to him often times

Tell him things as though I talk to myself

He doesn't seem to mind

And I always find

He carries this message with him

"Come, come,"

"Tell me your every sin"

"With me, your secret is safe."

He is a judgement-free place

It's not my place

But, looking into his face...

I can't fight the feeling...

That he is safe

There will be no harm in revealing...

What is in my heart

From the simplistic, beautiful parts

To the darkest, broken arts

As he speaks his piece

I struggle to not release...

The things that arise in my mind

The things that he should never find

But, part of me doesn't care

Part of me would truly dare

To say what should not be said

And for one moment

My heart...

My mind...

Are split in two

Author's Note

I know I said in the beginning that I would not censor my thoughts and words in this piece, but I couldn't find it in me to weave this piece with those things added into the mix. Besides, this whole thing that I'm feeling is wrong anyway. He's like my second subject for my "Forbidden" poem. *sigh*

Reviews

[Molly Anna]

This is a truly beautiful poem. You drew me right into the plot, drawing a visual in my mind. I was totally thinking 'Take the chance! Go! He must love her in return, right? I tell you, I absolutely love everything that is able to grab my attention, and keep it until the very end, and you have done that brilliantly! Keep up the good work! And may she finally rack up enough courage to say how she truly feels...:)

[Tessa Melendez]

Thank you very much. This poem is actually about a struggle I deal with. Not a story. But, I could never rack up the courage to tell him my true feelings. It's a completely wrong thing I feel. But, I have told him to read this piece and tell me what he thinks. I'm still waiting for him to read it.

[Molly Anna]

Oh, I see...I'm so sorry. I hope everything works out for you!

[Tessa Melendez]

Thank you.

[Inject Positivity]

So beautifully done Tessa, your words splendidly reveals the passionate yet longing you have... I love the deep meaning of this poem... I felt like the Poet's emotional heart is spontaneously revealed through this write... A thought provoking write... You are amazing my frnd... God bless you...

Sincerely
Dhiman

[Tessa Melendez]

Thanks so much Dhiman. I'm glad that it came across to you in the way I wanted it to. I'm anxious though because I told the subject of my piece to read it and he has not told me what he thinks of it.

[An owl on the moon]

Your words, your thoughts, your soul is such an ocean, rich and deep. Oh, Tessa, this is so beautifully dark, though filled with such pain, these feelings of loss. You open yourself, all the worlds within you, and reveal this longing heart that is beyond amazing. Makes me ache, and to wish you only joy to come.

[Tessa Melendez]

Thank you. I never intended for this piece to be dark, really. But, I thank you for your understanding.

[Aje]

WOW! this is subtlety in its deepest strong form. A perfect piece i can relate to. I love the climax as my Heart and Mind are still split in two's

[Tessa Melendez]

Thanks for reviewing my piece. It was really hard to write at some points because of the rhyming. I was trying hard to balance the rhyme scheme and the desire to put more into the piece. The ending was actually the easiest part beside the beginning part, they sort of fell into place. Thank you again for reviewing my poem!

[Aje]

Well, An excellent poem needs more than reviewing. If i could put them to video.. would have. I think you should let the poem flow first without worrying about rhymes, then when editing it, you could decide to add words that rhyme yet carry out the intended meaning with power. THUMBS UP