Just the Girl...

When I was young…

I was just a little girl

Not the one…

With wings to unfurl

 

Later on…

I was just the ugly girl

Not the one…

Who took part in fun

 

Now…

I am just the girl in black

The girl with a weight on her back

That no one could ever see

That no one could ever know

 

Now…

I am just the girl

Whose lips have forgotten how to smile

The girl who hasn’t had a true friend in awhile

 

Now…

I am just the girl

Who has yet to finally give in

And commit my final sin

Now…

I am just the girl

Who has felt enough damage

And has nothing left to salvage

 

Now…

I am just the girl

Who has had enough heartache.

Author's Note

Trying my hand at some poetry since this came to mind one day this week. Sad I know. Reviews are appreciated.

Reviews

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This is very sad but it needed to get out. Sorry to hear that you do not have a true friend but unfortunately that is the course of life. Most people what something from you and is very rare and I mean extremely for someone to like you for you. The real you. Thanks for sharing this emotion filled piece. I had be choked up. Blessings. N.

[Tessa Melendez]

Thank you very much. :)

[Anindita Janhabee]

Heartache... it's really very painful...
Painful stories often remain wonderful... Pretty sad to know about just a girl...
But honestly, you aren't just a girl... Believe me, in fact, no one in this world is just a girl... because only you can understand how you are loved by your close ones... only you do know what you mean to them.... so be happy with all that you have... life is short, enjoy to the fullest... hope for the best....
Anindita : )

[Tessa Melendez]

Thank you so much. :)

[Inject Positivity]

I'm sorry know your pain Tessa, trust me... You know how precious you are? More than millions of diamonds... We all need you here, we all know how good you are, a girl who always spread her light for those in need... You are not just a girl my frnd, you are precious like a star... I'm always here for you if you ever need me... God bless you my friend...

You are going to find your way soon, the whole world is waiting for you... Don't be afraid, you will get to your world where people will accept you love you and cherish you just the way you are, just like we do...

Sincerely
Dhiman

[Tessa Melendez]

You leave me speechless, Dhiman. Nearly in tears. I think that you have just said the most sweet thing I have ever "heard". I've never really felt precious to anyone. I've felt wanted and maybe partially needed. But, never precious. I can't tell you how your review just made me feel. All I can say is that, my love for you, Dhiman, has just expanded so much. Thank you so much.

[Inject Positivity]

You are not just the girl Tessa, and all I want you to know is that you are just too special, I really mean it... You are priceless...

[Tessa Melendez]

If only more people could make me feel that. Show me that I am valued. It is not very often that people see that I am a person, I have feelings. If more people saw the same things you and a few others do, maybe...I'd be happier. That's why a lot of my poems are drowned in emotion and sadness and hurt. Many people do not realize that sometimes they see my facade that I mentioned in Wishes (Part 2) and they treat that facade like a wall that will never break.

Thank you so much for your words, my valuable friend. I am so very blessed to know you.

[Inject Positivity]

I don't know if you trust in God or not but I want to tell you something that the Bible says about your worth, "even very hairs of your head are all numbered, fear not therefore, you are of more value than many sparrows"... The people who doesn't see the beauty inside you doesn't know what is beauty, so move on my frnd, live for yourself and for those who love you for who you are my sweet frnd...

[JMaster1]

It is sad but it's wonderful written
I love your style

[An owl on the moon]

You take us into the deepest places of you, of your journey. And one can see the edges of hope, even simply in the weariness of the world. I knew this path all to well, and long for you to find the sunrise wrapped around you soon.

[Tessa Melendez]

Thank you for your sweet review. I'm grateful that there is yet one more person who understands my struggle and can read into the poem.

[An owl on the moon]

I am glad you came here. You have such a powerful way with words and thoughts, and there are many here to help make sure you only grow stronger on this journey home.

[Tessa Melendez]

Thank you for even more kind words. I only came here to write and grow as a writer to become a great one someday. I hope that I continue to meet more people like you who will help me grow as a person and a writer.

[An owl on the moon]

That I can promise you. This is a garden, and you'll find plenty of warm sun and rushing rivers to help your roots grow deep. :)

[Tessa Melendez]

thank you. :)

[Mara]

really enjoyed reading this poem,
love this line 'And commit my final sin'
Thanks for sharing!

[MadalaJose]

Sincere. Emotional. it draws the reader closer to the persona, to understand and feel the social pain that the persona is a victim to. You have employed a very effective to do that, portraying different phases in the life of persona, it makes the reader feel like s/he has known the persona all her life.
good work

[Tessa Melendez]

Thank you very much for your review. I'm glad you enjoyed my piece. :)

[~ Kimberly ~]

I love what this poem is trying to say. I tried to write one similar to this a week ago, and I lacked the type of emotion this one put across. Good work. :)

[Tessa Melendez]

Thank you. Writing this was all from my own heart and to write a piece like this you have to feel all the emotion to write it and find the right words for every stanza.

[Kristan A. Mohammed]

I really like this Tessa. It wreaks of sorrow and pain. A kind of pain that most people can relate to but cannot put into words. I love how you started by saying 'WHEN I WAS YOUNG' and then gradually moves on by saying 'LATER ON' and then finally on to saying 'NOW'. I think its brilliant. it does wonders for the flow. But I must give ample applause on how breathtakingly heartbreaking this piece is. And so true.
Keep up the good work.
Stay Inspired.

[Tessa Melendez]

Thanks! It's definitely a piece I can say was written out of my own blood and tears. I have a couple more I wanna put up but haven't gotten to yet. And I will try to stay inspired.