Indignation

Alcohol will shut me up, where's the whiskey at noon?

I sit here tappity-tapping
Playing a little social game
Drawing attention with the sound of a keyboard
So that y'all will look at me for a second
Weep, weep, I'm so misunderstood.

But if you really did know
The cunning that's going into this
The ego-stroking satisfaction of a job well done
It's altogether frightening
How calculated I am.

Pop-fizz-bang, make a flash
Anything to catch your eye's appeal
This is all so arrogantly hollow, so you know
I'm just dreaming bigger
Than I think you are.

Author's Note

Seriously, it's time for a jaded drink to dull contemptuous eyes.

Reviews

[Ees]

Don't we all assume or dreams are bigger than everyone else's? Don't we all think we are smarter?
At first I thought that you were writing this as somebody else, in the first stanza it came across a little bit like you were mocking somebody, or everybody, or those people who try so hard or are so much more sensitive than I am.
Then, in the following two stanzas I came to see it as you really speaking the truth, admitting that it is all part of it, to catch someone's eye, get attention. It was your manipulation that was outsmarting all those who gave you a second look.
I live my whole life that way. Is it really a game? I do things to be the center of most attentions. I don't think of that as manipulating those around me, I just think of it as me cultivating a certain public persona for people to write and talk about after I am gone.
haha.
None of that means that I know what I think about this as a poem. It is pretty good, and cocky as you intended it to be. If I had to guess you accomplished exactly what you were trying to when writing this poem, so that warrants a great job!
have fun,
Erin

[tekphobik]

Thanks. I'm glad you see life as a game too. This was written after reading a slough of bad poems on here and getting drunk. I love irony.

[Ees]

There are a lot of bad ones.
Being drunk should help.

[p.kuhl]

sometimes i've had this moment of clarity while listening to a band perform. like "wow, these guys must really know how to captivate people that NEED to be captivated."

it's like hypnotism sometimes. idk if that's what you were going for, but it sparked a thought. good poem.

[TaiPie]

Let me be so bold as to say your imagery in this piece is absolutely amazing. I can imagine this entire story as it unfolds. The last two lines are definitely my favorite of the entire piece. Stunning!

[Me]

great imagery. nice penning

[Alkonost]

I love the "inside voice" presented here. I can just picture someone playing a keyboard with a sideways grin, their face not matching their actions... And we get to hear the truth! This is very good, and the last two lines are my favorite. The cynicism is very satisfying.

[DearSweetAgony]

Flawless, this write is FANTASTIC in every way possible!