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A Poem by tekphobik
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Metaphor is overrated.

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I was going to write a poem
About a boat preparing for a battle at sea
As a metaphor for my own resolution
To work on writing something meaningful
And then I realized
F**k boats,
I'd rather just swim naked.
Why get all dressed up just to get wet?

© 2011 tekphobik


Author's Note

tekphobik
Yep, that's the mood round here. Step up and I'll tear you to pieces.

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I love it... f**k boats... I can't get over it...I think I have read this about 5 times and still laugh...good stuff.

Posted 12 Years Ago


tekphobik

12 Years Ago

Thanks. Read it another 5 times and you get a secret bonus prize.
Ghost of Jupiter

12 Years Ago

Okay done...what do I get?
I enjoy skinny dipping =D, nice poem

Posted 12 Years Ago


Ha you made me laugh there at the end - metaphor can be dreadfully annoying

Posted 12 Years Ago


tekphobik

12 Years Ago

Sexual double entendre makes me sound really clever.
I'll step up & bid..or call? (as in the game of poker, lol)

Yep, why? Enjoyed this one. ~ pat

Posted 12 Years Ago


tekphobik

12 Years Ago

I was far gone with drink when writing this and looking for a fight after reading a lot of bad poetr.. read more
It's an ironic stab at myself, swapping a complex metaphor of a boat preparing for battle and then replacing it with the very simple metaphor of swimming naked.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Isn't this just a metephoric poem for the restlessness that seems to bleed through your verse? Will muse more over the last line. Pointless to describe more.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Excellent...well written!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Ha! I love this one! another brilliant piece of truth. All the so called "side issues" are irrelevant. ;) nude, yes, just nude!!!

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Added on December 17, 2011
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tekphobik
tekphobik

Red Deer, Alberta, Canada



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I live for the words. Artistry is taking pieces of your soul out and throwing them against a wall to make someone else feel something or experience some sort of insight. It's the only thing worth li.. more..

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