The Pierce

The crown of thorn's perspective during the beating/crucifixion of Jesus Christ.

Here I am, from the rose bush
Twisted in the shape of a crown
Whose unlucky soul will I pierce today?
This long desire of mine
My kin has been raised for these moments
All we desire is to have man's blood

I am carried on a ragged cloth
I can see the soldiers beating
Beating a man covered in his own blood
I get ever so closely to him
I can almost taste his blood now

Wait... No! Not this man! Do not pierce this man!
This is my Master, my Ruler, my Creator!
Do not lay this guilt upon me!
Crashed into His head, I am, by these beasts!
I can hear His grunts of painful grief
I have no sheep to give to You
I have no sacred doves for my own sake
Please, Lord, forgive me, for I have sinned against Thee.

Author's Note

This is currently a rough draft for an English poem project I'm working on, so it may change...
Also, I made this on March 13's morning during an unexpected study hall, so when it's truly in its finished form it'll be a lot more polished. (: This was just something I wanted to get started on to stop procrastinating for my class...

Reviews

[eddie]

this poem is amazing to say the least

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

I really like this poem, it shows very deep emotions. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Clouded in Hopeful Illu..]

It needs some work because it sounds very busy towards the end. I like the idea over all. I never would have thought about doing something like this. It is a very unique piece of writing and I give you credit for that. It is great how you make sure to tell the audiance that it was the thorns pleasure to be on a man's head, but not His. Good work.

[Molly]

Very interesting take on the Crucifixion! I'd never thought to look at it from the crown's point of view.

[TamerQtaish]

Hello new comer!
From within your words I sense more than one feeling within this poem of yours, I might be wrong and I might be right so I wont go into that...

I love your way of putting the words into deeper meaning, simple, but beautiful just like a rose
Wishing you all the best and telling you that you go girl!
Once again, all the best,
Tamer Qtaish