The Sombreness Song

A Song about tears and all the nice things in life!

I am no devil that rules freely in the world of gushing grey
but people see the horns of hatred planted
juvenile prejudiced feelings tucked away
hope will not fall onto you,
because life is too concise for tears of insanity

The slow movement of tears rolling, falling
breaking in shattered pieces of malignity
smiles filled with hostility
laughter from crying the song of sombreness,
nightmares will become friends

Life is filled with monotonous movements, moments consecrated with blood
red velvet colour of the blind, seen to be unseen,
lit by the fire of emptiness, lonesome words for the deprived,

When nightmares become friends, when dreams enemies
the song of sombreness is your friend for live through the darkened halls
The slow movement of tears rolling, falling
breaking in shattered pieces of malignity
smiles filled with hostility
laughter from crying the song of sombreness,
because life is too concise for tears of insanity.

Author's Note

bam! please comment =]

Reviews

[alegria]

i loved reading it..nice work:)

[G. Anderson]

I love the rhythm and fluency you create in this piece. I feel there's an underlying meaning to every stanza, and this poem should be read aloud multiple times to grasp the intensity and amplitude of your thought. Great write :)

[DontBlink158]

It's great! I really enjoyed reading it!

[Kayla :)]

Really dark. But it was really good :)

[Rohan Tandon]

really dark, but honest, true. i can relate to it. thanks 4 sharing. i luv'd the first stanza.

[stars are far]

Greatly written piece =)

[TheSweet]

This could not fail to impress me :P I like the words, i like how it's written, I like the idea of it. I love the word sombreness. The first stanza was my favourite.

That being said, I think it might have flowed a little better with random rhymes thrown in. I mean 'breaking in shattered pieces of malignity, smiles filled with hostility'

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Whew the vocabulary in this... very nice.
Love this line it seems to be so true:
"When nightmares become friends, when dreams enemies"

[BeccaB]

wow this is a realy good piece ... i think this is one of my favourit this month actualy ^_^ well done its are realy well written piece and has a nice flow through it and a good poetic rhythem

[Jeremy Baker]

"Laughter from crying the song of sombreness ..."

This contradictory line seems to sum up the poem so well. Great write.