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Once upon a time

In a world that didn’t exist

I sat and watched you walking away

Out the door everyone wants to walk in

But you walked out

Something went loose in your head that night

It was me messing with the screws that keep you together

Blood spilled over your body

The one that you own

Her name was Ivy

But did you even know

She was my sister �"

“She was my sister

But did you even know

Her name was Ivy

The one that you own

Blood spilled over your body

It was me messing with the screws that keep you together

Something went loose in your head that night

But you walked out

Out the door everyone wants to walk in

I sat and watched you walking away

In a world that didn’t exist

Once upon a time”

I was there...

I was

I am

Reviews

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Haha... very nice write, with a feeling that lingers in it. I'm not sure if you meant to put this in structure to the poem, but the way the words are centered it makes it relate to this line, looking like the structure is a screw, which is awesome if you meant to or didn't mean to make it look like that lolz:
"It was me messing with the screws that keep you together"

[CHRIS ANDES]

it was like a scene in a Hollywood movie!!!

[Priscilla Sayers]

Granted, I am sure if I read all of the chapters i will probably know the answer, right. on to do just that soon;)

[Priscilla Sayers]

Not sure about this one. It left me wanting to know who Ivy is. Why is she walking away and just so many questions. You draw the reader in wanting more... obviously and you should know that is a talent. Very well done!

[_Hanabi_]

hhhhhhmmmmmmmmm!!!!!!!!!

[BlueDreams]

A very nice write :-)

[EMF]

This isn't good. It's brilliant and harsh. Stripping away persona and preconception. Great job

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

fantastic! :)